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duncombec:

--- Quote from: Tin_Grin8444 on 24. May 2020, 11:04:49 AM ---Wow! I haven't considered working on multiple at the same time! That's impressive for sure. Is there a post topic where you discuss specific ideas? I'd be happy to offer some feedback and recommendations if you're game!

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I don't post many stories here these days (being aimed mainly at the male patient angle I get the feeling they aren't as popular), but I;m always working on multiple things. Some times that's just how the mind works!

Braceface2015:

--- Quote from: duncombec on 25. May 2020, 01:04:06 AM ---I don't post many stories here these days (being aimed mainly at the male patient angle I get the feeling they aren't as popular), but I'm always working on multiple things. Some times that's just how the mind works!

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Any stories that you do write are always appreciated. I can understand your feelings. You are writing for a small portion of an already small segment of the population. You have your story site to maintain and expand and that is good enough. I have read some of your stories and even though they have limited appeal for me, I do still enjoy the way your mind works. It is always nice to see how different people write and your stories are worth reading and sharing.

firesonga:

--- Quote from: duncombec on 25. May 2020, 01:04:06 AM ---I don't post many stories here these days (being aimed mainly at the male patient angle I get the feeling they aren't as popular), but I;m always working on multiple things. Some times that's just how the mind works!

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I like the different protagonists. While female is more prevalent a good male story is great to me as well. Your writing has always impressed me.

GarotaFakeBR:

--- Quote from: Tin_Grin8444 on 24. May 2020, 10:21:19 AM ---Howdy howdy! I was chatting with another member about the stories and thought I'd post part of one of my replies here, seeings how I think it could be real constructive. ;D  I'd love to discuss this kinda jazz with anybody who's willing to chat about it!
(Also please note that I'm not looking to offend or hurt anyone's feelings, as I know this stuff is a genuine outlet of creativity and REALLY isn't easy, but I think the criticism can be super helpful because the folks writing on the forum are worth it and deserve to be held to a high standard because of how good they are. <3  )

(Was discussing my story "Managing a Metal Mouth")
While I've seen the scam plot done in other stories, I'd much rather keep things pretty positive ( and even Wholesome) overall. Cynthia's character is designed to be a genuinely caring one who just happens to be a huge nerd for orthodontics. I wanted to introduce more of her family at some point, but present them as likeable, even bigger nerds than Cynthia, but never sinister. I had the same opinion about the disillusioned plot. I feel like "Person gets braces and hates them" is a little too common of a trope. While I tried to be semi-realistic with Gregory's initial reactions to them, if I were to continue this story, Cynthia would play a massive role in Greg developing a genuine liking for his braces and all that they represent. I considered giving some development to Dr. Collins and even involve Sarah in some orthodontic work of her own  ;D There's certainly plenty I can do but I definitely don't want to do a few things:
My only criticism with the "Never been kissed" story is that I felt like it should've ended a while ago. There's a grace to be found in knowing when to end your story, so I'm definitely trying to be careful about letting my story go on for TOO long, ya know? While it was interesting to see the changes in perspective, it almost got too caught up in the sub-plots and lost the charm of what made me like the first few chapters. (Also I'm aware that the writer for these stories knows English as a second language, which makes the story even more impressive, but I want to maintain the same criticism, because I think they deserve to be held to the same standard, because they (and their story) really are that good.)

 An even more common thing I see is folks putting out a REALLY GOOD start, but leaving it at just a start. The "Fine Print", "Short term pain for long term gain", and "Fixed Braces" stories all had this in common. I loved the beginning, but they never got past their beginnings, so I made sure to at least go somewhere with "Managing a Metal Mouth". If I do continue it, it might come in the form of a "Book 2" and I'll label the start as "Book 1" just to make sure that if I continue the story, you can read the individual sections one at a time, making them more digestible and easier to keep up with. I'm sure if the writer of "Never Been Kissed" did this it would help a ton to keep up with it.



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I totally agree and I don't feel like keeping up with it.

The fact is that in the end I was fed up with the story, well, not exactly with the story, but part of it. While writing I found out that I don't like one of the characters (at all), so as soon as I had the closure I felt like I needed, I quit, but I also think it went too far.

After a while, I read the whole story and I didn't like part of the ending but it's still a story I liked writing, while it still talked to me... until it didn't.
It's just my second story and I intend to keep writing (I'm not sure if I want to post it regularly, as I did with this one though) so there's still room for improvement, I guess. Regarding the language barrier, I know I did my best, I know I sound too formal/informal sometimes (or it's just weird and amiss) but I might say it was easier than writing in my native language.

And, as I said, criticism is always helpful.
Be sure that when I come up with a new story I'll take it into consideration.

Thank you for your feedback. ;)

Braceface2015:
It is always up to the writer when a story should end.

I always advise people to write about what interests them and not worry about what other people think. If you are not happy with how a story is written, it will often read that way to others as well.

Take your time writing your stories and take a break between parts if you need to. I sometimes will take a break and return to a story after a while.

Your understanding of the English language is very good and you did very well writing in it. I always use a spell-checker when I write and recommend Grammarly. It catches many of the things that I miss as I am writing.

I will sometimes write two or three stories using the same characters so that I can tell the side-stories. Other writers will separate their stories into parts that tell the stories from several different points of view and link them all together. Having a book 1, book2, etc is also a good way of telling the story and linking them all together.

Whatever you choose to do, I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Braceface2015
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