Author Topic: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~  (Read 20348 times)

Offline m1090y

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Re: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~
« Reply #15 on: 27. May 2020, 15:17:33 PM »
Howdy howdy! I was chatting with another member about the stories and thought I'd post part of one of my replies here, seeings how I think it could be real constructive. ;D  I'd love to discuss this kinda jazz with anybody who's willing to chat about it!
(Also please note that I'm not looking to offend or hurt anyone's feelings, as I know this stuff is a genuine outlet of creativity and REALLY isn't easy, but I think the criticism can be super helpful because the folks writing on the forum are worth it and deserve to be held to a high standard because of how good they are. <3  )

(Was discussing my story "Managing a Metal Mouth")
While I've seen the scam plot done in other stories, I'd much rather keep things pretty positive ( and even Wholesome) overall. Cynthia's character is designed to be a genuinely caring one who just happens to be a huge nerd for orthodontics. I wanted to introduce more of her family at some point, but present them as likeable, even bigger nerds than Cynthia, but never sinister. I had the same opinion about the disillusioned plot. I feel like "Person gets braces and hates them" is a little too common of a trope. While I tried to be semi-realistic with Gregory's initial reactions to them, if I were to continue this story, Cynthia would play a massive role in Greg developing a genuine liking for his braces and all that they represent. I considered giving some development to Dr. Collins and even involve Sarah in some orthodontic work of her own  ;D There's certainly plenty I can do but I definitely don't want to do a few things:
My only criticism with the "Never been kissed" story is that I felt like it should've ended a while ago. There's a grace to be found in knowing when to end your story, so I'm definitely trying to be careful about letting my story go on for TOO long, ya know? While it was interesting to see the changes in perspective, it almost got too caught up in the sub-plots and lost the charm of what made me like the first few chapters. (Also I'm aware that the writer for these stories knows English as a second language, which makes the story even more impressive, but I want to maintain the same criticism, because I think they deserve to be held to the same standard, because they (and their story) really are that good.)

 An even more common thing I see is folks putting out a REALLY GOOD start, but leaving it at just a start. The "Fine Print", "Short term pain for long term gain", and "Fixed Braces" stories all had this in common. I loved the beginning, but they never got past their beginnings, so I made sure to at least go somewhere with "Managing a Metal Mouth". If I do continue it, it might come in the form of a "Book 2" and I'll label the start as "Book 1" just to make sure that if I continue the story, you can read the individual sections one at a time, making them more digestible and easier to keep up with. I'm sure if the writer of "Never Been Kissed" did this it would help a ton to keep up with it.

I truly enjoyed writing the story, and even letting it write itself at some points. Experimenting with elements of foreshadowing even from the beginning was something I had a real good time with lol
I do have one technique I often use and it results in a story being longer than it was supposed to be.  Let's suppose I come up with an idea that I want to experiment with.  It's not a plot idea but just a scene or event.  Rather than start from scratch and create characters and a setting, I just work it into the current story.  It saves creating new characters and a setting.  It's just a lazy habit I have.  If you read "Research Subjects Wanted" (, for example, then you see I just kept using the same story to explore various ideas.  The story wandered and wandered.
In thinking about your post, I can see that perhaps I would have preferred if the result was several smaller stories.

Offline duncombec

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Re: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~
« Reply #16 on: 27. May 2020, 16:20:59 PM »

I totally agree and I don't feel like keeping up with it.

The fact is that in the end I was fed up with the story, well, not exactly with the story, but part of it. While writing I found out that I don't like one of the characters (at all), so as soon as I had the closure I felt like I needed, I quit, but I also think it went too far.

After a while, I read the whole story and I didn't like part of the ending but it's still a story I liked writing, while it still talked to me... until it didn't.
It's just my second story and I intend to keep writing (I'm not sure if I want to post it regularly, as I did with this one though) so there's still room for improvement, I guess. Regarding the language barrier, I know I did my best, I know I sound too formal/informal sometimes (or it's just weird and amiss) but I might say it was easier than writing in my native language.

And, as I said, criticism is always helpful.
Be sure that when I come up with a new story I'll take it into consideration.

Thank you for your feedback. ;)

I'm intrigued to know which character you didn't like in the end and why you fell out of love with them.

Sometimes, that does happen. You get all excited, and then over time your excitement over a particular character or plot point wanes... it happened a lot to me in the early days.

That said, don't feel afraid of trying more things. To an extent, there is nothing to stop you leaving the story for a few months then coming back to it and re-writing it, improving it, adjusting it. Also don't be afraid to write collaboratively, or just a small scene. Personally, I'd rather you write something, and pause it part way through, not be happy with it, etc., than write nothing at all.

Offline pi314phi18

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Re: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~
« Reply #17 on: 06. June 2020, 17:30:02 PM »
I had written to polo and Marty and they dont anwser me

Offline Braceface2015

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Re: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~
« Reply #18 on: 06. June 2020, 18:13:57 PM »
Have patience. It can take them a while to reply. Keep trying and eventually you will get in.

Offline elio23145

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Re: ~*~ BracesStorys ~*~
« Reply #19 on: 20. July 2020, 23:11:44 PM »
how can I read the stories here? I wish I could!!