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Story: Team Work Makes the Dream Work
« on: 22. December 2020, 19:35:04 PM »
Part 1: An appointment is made
 
Elise was always described as happy and very active. Always told how talented she was in school and had a lot of friends.
In high school she did every club she could make time for, and in college she was in a sorority and several other activities.  She was fresh out of college and began work as a high school teacher. She was settling into her new rhythm nicely, and loved the cozy apartment she’d rented just inside of town. It was just 20 minutes away from where she grew up.

Around the beginning of summer her first year, Elise began to have a horrible toothache. Her molars were sensitive and she hated how her teeth were beginning to crowd. After having tried everything she could on her own, she searched online for an affordable dr. who would take her meager insurance.

She came across an ad for Hometown Dentistry; practice in the basement of a posh office building. The doctor, Dr. Brandt was a younger man in his 30’s, and very strict. In the dental community, he was seen as a miracle worker orthodontist who had patients that were “difficult” by most standards. Meaning non-compliant, or poor hygiene. Something our Elise would’ve known if she clicked on the orthodontics page.

She filled out the online forms, and was puzzled when a contract came up.

“I _________________ will hereby hand over my treatment to Dr. Brandt to insure my health and safety through my time with him. I understand that hygiene and compliance are very important to my health”. Hmm… SHe shrugged and signed. Why wouldn’t she go to an award winning doctor that did everything from general dentistry to orthodontics?

A few hours later she gets an email with her appointment time. She nervously puts it into her calendar. 



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Re: Story: Team Work Makes the Dream Work
« Reply #1 on: 22. December 2020, 21:52:47 PM »
Heheheh, very nice start!

Oh yes, teamwork does make the dream work. But it also makes a nightmare work, too.~ >:D

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« Reply #2 on: 22. December 2020, 21:57:26 PM »
I was going to be the first one to comment, but didn't manage it.

You have the start to what could be a promising story, but there isn't quite enough of it yet to form an opinion. Give us some more to read so that we have some idea of what the story will be.

My next advice is what I give to all new writers, please label the chapters as you post them so that we all know which it is. Eg.  chapter 1, chapter 2, part 1 part 2, etc.

Also, using a spellchecker before posting is a good idea, since they will catch most of the spelling mistakes that are missed.

I frequently find mistakes in the stories that I write, even after I have gone over them several times, so I know how useful they are.

Now to the really important part. Write the story that you want to write, don't worry about what the rest of us think. If you are not happy with the story that you write, it will show in how the story turns out. Take your time writing it, there is no need to rush to post a chapter until you are satisfied with it.

I would like to add your story to TheArchive as soon as there is more of it. I like to get permission from each writer before I add their stories to my collection.

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From a technical standpoint, you have made a very good start. Your spelling is good, your sentence structure is good, and when I ran it through Grammarly, there were only a couple of things that showed up and I didn't think that the suggestions were correct or needed.

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« Reply #3 on: 22. December 2020, 22:39:06 PM »
I was going to be the first one to comment, but did manage it.

You have the start to what could be a promising story, but there isn't quite enough of it yet to form an opinion. Give us some more to read so that we have some idea of what the story will be.

My next advice is what I give to all new writers, please label the chapters as you post them so that we all know which it is. Eg.  chapter 1, chapter 2, part 1 part 2, etc.

Also, using a spellchecker before posting is a good idea, since they will catch most of the spelling mistakes that are missed.

I frequently find mistakes in the stories that I write, even after I have gone over them several times, so I know how useful they are.

Now to the really important part. Write the story that you want to write, don't worry about what the rest of us think. If you are not happy with the story that you write, it will show in how the story turns out. Take your time writing it, there is no need to rush to post a chapter until you are satisfied with it.

I would like to add your story to TheArchive as soon as there is more of it. I like to get permission from each writer before I add their stories to my collection.

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From a technical standpoint, you have made a very good start. Your spelling is good, your sentence structure is good, and when I ran it through Grammarly, there were only a couple of things that showed up and I didn't think that the suggestions were correct or needed.

It's an honor that you would add it and I give full permission to add the future parts of the story to The Archive. I will be labeling the parts to come ❤️

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Re: Story: Team Work Makes the Dream Work
« Reply #4 on: 22. December 2020, 22:40:17 PM »
Heheheh, very nice start!

Oh yes, teamwork does make the dream work. But it also makes a nightmare work, too.~ >:D

I'm glad you like it so far!

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« Reply #5 on: 23. December 2020, 00:29:47 AM »
Thank you for giving me permission and I appreciate the willingness to label the chapters. I am looking forward to reading your stories.

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« Reply #6 on: 23. December 2020, 01:49:21 AM »
Hello boheme good start of your story  please do continue with it 

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« Reply #7 on: 23. December 2020, 17:13:03 PM »
Hello boheme good start of your story  please do continue with it

Thank you for the kind words! I'm hoping to update in the next week.

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« Reply #8 on: 23. December 2020, 17:21:35 PM »
Great start, looking forward to more!

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« Reply #9 on: 23. December 2020, 18:04:22 PM »
Great start, looking forward to more!

I'm glad you like it!

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« Reply #10 on: 25. December 2020, 13:44:36 PM »
I'll also say it's a nice beginning, please continue!

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« Reply #11 on: 29. December 2020, 23:28:12 PM »
Part 2: Root Canals

Elise stood making her hair into a messy bun in her bathroom. She then brushed and flossed her teeth and took a very close look at them. She never really liked her smile, and really hated going to the dentist. She looked at the time and locked up before going to her car. The drive was beginning to feel very familiar to her. She saw a nice office building and was shaking as she parked; surely she was mistaken. It was where she used to go to the orthodontist in high school and middle school.

She shuddered at the memory.

When Elise was 12 her mother took her to see a Dr. Roman, the orthodontist that every one of her friends used, and every one of them hated. He was an old man who was very strict. His treatment room was the same as it had been in the ‘70s probably, and had an open layout. She was often humiliated as he scolded her about not wearing her elastics and her hygiene. Dr. Roman's goal was to have a smile that was perfect and that would be done in a slower fashion to encourage more control as the teeth moved. He ignored when children begged and promise to do better. He would never tell them what he was doing, just their parents.

What made patients especially uneasy was his cheerful disposition during speaking to parents, and how that would change when they were non-compliant.

Headgear was an especially sore subject for Elise. When it was suggested she wear it, she was 14 and just beginning high school. Dr. Roman advised wearing the headgear when she was non-compliant with her rubber bands. She was left a sobbing mess when her mother agreed to have the headgear wired in and springs placed. It added a year to her treatment and it wouldn’t come off until the last three months of braces when she was 16, almost 17.

She swore after moving to college she would never go near Dr. Roman again, and religiously wore her retainer nightly for about a year. During a move, the retainer was lost, and she kept putting off calling until she just shrugged it off. Her teeth looked good still, and there was no way that she was going back to see Dr. Roman.

Present Day:

Elise took a breath and tried to slow her breathing as she walked down that horribly familiar hallway. Her body let out a sigh of relief though when she saw that Dr. Roman wasn't there, but Dr. Brandt had totally remodeled everything. The waiting room had a play area, comfortable chairs to wait in, and a cute little reception window. She walked over and smiled at the receptionist.  She had curly red hair that was long and beautiful and smiled showing a full mouth of banded braces.

K: "Hi, I'm Kara, are you Elise?"

E: I am, thank you!

K: Welcome to our practice. I see that you signed all the forms? Wow, we don’t usually have adults who do that on their own.

Kara looks confused as she looks over the paperwork.

E: I thought it would save time.

Elise sits down and noticed a few patients going in and out of the office. Most looked upset, and a few of the teens had headgear just like she did. "Thank God I'm just here for my toothache," she thought to herself.

The door opened and a beautiful assistant escorted out a teenager with a mouth of metal. She spoke to their parents advising that now she was in their care that her appliances would be wired in and she would come every four weeks. Elise looked down and felt relieved when her name was called.

The hygienist assigned to her had beautiful black hair, olive skin, and wore her hair in a tight bun. Her blue scrubs fit well, and she seemed very friendly as she walked Elise through the door. Her smile was blinding white and showed gorgeous teeth.

“I’m Hannah and I’ll be cleaning your teeth and assisting Dr. Brandt during your time here.” the hygienistst said, leading her down a hall of rooms with closed doors. The back was completely different than she remembered it being which gave her great relief. She and Hannah chatted to her about being a patient of the previous doctor and how nice it was to see so many changes.

Hannah brought Elise to the very back room that was labeled Consult. X-rays were taken, and Hannah began what would be one of the most thorough cleanings Elise ever experienced. She frowned as Hannah scraped her gum line and gripped the chair when her sensitive teeth were scaled.

After 30 mins of cleaning, a tall man in his late 30’s walked in. He stood over Elise who was reclined and getting her mouth rinsed out. “I’m Dr. Brandt, welcome to our practice!” He waved and studied her X-rays then sat at her side with his lap under her head.

“She has two visible cavities, Dr. and needs to improve on hygiene, “ Hannah said while Dr. Brandt pulled up his mask. With a deep voice he smiled behind the mask and spoke, “we’ll get there. Now I hear that you have some sensitive teeth?”

Elise nodded and pointed to her left side where the pain was and answered questions about her dental history. Dr. Brandt looked at her mouth for several minutes and rattled off a lot of numbers and notes to Hannah. She was made to bite a lot and move her jaw certain ways. She was confused but figured he was being thorough.

“Elise, you have two very deep cavities that will require root canals I’m afraid. I also see some more work that we will talk about in a bit.” Elise could only grunt her understanding. A dam and block were placed, and before she knew it Dr. Brandt was drilling. The procedure took two hours; midway Hannah smiled behind her mask. “Dr, Elise said she was a patient of your uncle’s. Isn’t that neat?”

“It is! Orthodontics I assume?” Elise gave a grunt indicating he was correct. “Well, we will have to see how you’ve done since you were a patient last.” Elise tried to object but the dam and drill stopped her.

When Dr. Brandt was done he sat Elise up and typed into a computer stationed in the room. He looked over at her and smiled. “I see that you were given retainers by my uncle...Your parents signed a compliance contract; interesting.”

Elise spoke with a garbled tone due to the numbing. “I wasn’t good at my elastics back then.”

Dr. Brandt scooted his chair over and reclined her once more. Elise’s eyes opened wide as the light was brought down again. "Hannah, can you reschedule my afternoon appointments?"

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Re: Story: Team Work Makes the Dream Work
« Reply #12 on: 30. December 2020, 00:45:37 AM »
very nice looking forward to the next story

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« Reply #13 on: 30. December 2020, 01:27:29 AM »
Ah, this is getting better and better with each chapter.


Oh, something i noticed, in chapter 1, you put that the doctor was in his 60's.

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She came across an ad for Hometown Dentistry; practice in the basement of a posh office building.
The doctor, Dr. Brandt was an older man in his 60’s, and very strict.


However, in chapter 2, he's in his 30's?  ???

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After 30 mins of cleaning, a tall man in his late 30’s walked in.
He stood over Elise who was reclined and getting her mouth rinsed out. “I’m Dr. Brandt, welcome to our practice!”

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« Reply #14 on: 30. December 2020, 02:48:13 AM »
I'm enjoying this so far! I love the mix of professionalism and sadism from the dental staff, and Kara and Hannah sound very cute, I hope they play a large role later on! Can't wait to see what they have in store for Elise, and I wonder what the compliance contract entails...

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« Reply #15 on: 30. December 2020, 03:11:25 AM »
Part 1: An appointment is made
 
Elise was always described as happy and very active. Always told how talented she was in school and had a lot of friends.
In high school she did every club she could make time for, and in college she was in a sorority and several other activities.  She was fresh out of college and began work as a high school teacher. She was settling into her new rhythm nicely, and loved the cozy apartment she’d rented just inside of town. It was just 20 minutes away from where she grew up.

Around the beginning of summer her first year, Elise began to have a horrible toothache. Her molars were sensitive and she hated how her teeth were beginning to crowd. After having tried everything she could on her own, she searched online for an affordable dr. who would take her meager insurance.

She came across an ad for Hometown Dentistry; practice in the basement of a posh office building. The doctor, Dr. Brandt was a man in his 30s, and very strict. In the dental community, he was seen as a miracle worker orthodontist who had patients that were “difficult” by most standards. Meaning non-compliant, or poor hygiene. Something our Elise would’ve known if she clicked on the orthodontics page.

She filled out the online forms, and was puzzled when a contract came up.

“I _________________ will hereby hand over my treatment to Dr. Brandt to insure my health and safety through my time with him. I understand that hygiene and compliance are very important to my health”. Hmm… SHe shrugged and signed. Why wouldn’t she go to an award winning doctor that did everything from general dentistry to orthodontics?

A few hours later she gets an email with her appointment time. She nervously puts it into her calendar.

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« Reply #16 on: 30. December 2020, 03:12:38 AM »



Oh, something i noticed, in chapter 1, you put that the doctor was in his 60's.


However, in chapter 2, he's in his 30's?  ???
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@TimeandBrace You're right! Sorry about that. It is fixed

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« Reply #17 on: 30. December 2020, 03:14:59 AM »
No worries. Ah, i believe there's a button that'll let you modify the original post?

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« Reply #18 on: 30. December 2020, 03:28:56 AM »
I have made the alteration to the copy in TheArchive. It's nice to see that other people are reading the stories and care enough to point out things that they see can be fixed. It makes us all better writers.

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« Reply #19 on: 30. December 2020, 04:38:39 AM »
I have made the alteration to the copy in TheArchive. It's nice to see that other people are reading the stories and care enough to point out things that they see can be fixed. It makes us all better writers.

It really does! Details make all the difference

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« Reply #20 on: 30. December 2020, 19:01:38 PM »
Part 3: Contract Clarity

Elise tried to sit up on her elbow but Hannah gently pressed her back into the chair. “I’ll be right back Dr.” The hygienist said winking at Elise.

E: “Dr. Brandt, I thought that we were done? I can’t possibly take someone else’s appointment r-really.”

DB: “No no, you lay back. We’re just talking yeah? You and I can discuss these contracts of yours.”

Dr. Brandt picked up a tablet from the computer station and fussed with it a bit before handing it to Elise. Her hands shook as she read it, and just so it really sunk in, Dr. Brandt read from the compliance section of each contract.

Original Agreement:
 Any and all appliances are to be wired or cemented in.
If a relapse does occur within 15 years, the office will place her on the relapse treatment program. (This cost her parents an extra $500.00)
If the patient goes anywhere else to seek orthodontic treatment for themselves, the parents will be sued for the cost of braces plus damages. ($3,500)

Adult Orthodontic Compliance Program
I will submit to any and all treatment suggested by Dr. Brandt and staff.
I will attend all appointments. If I am late or break my braces I will be fined $200.00 and have time added to my treatment.
I have chosen the compliance program which means that I will only have Dr. Brandt and any of his future partners tend to any and all dental needs, including general dentistry and or oral surgery.
I have proven to be non-compliant and have brought myself here to force what is in my best interest in regards to my oral health.
If I do want out of the compliance program, I will have to pay the cost of treatment plus a penalty fee of $500.00. This penalty and other cost have to be paid in one lump sum and I must schedule a two-hour appointment to removal all orthodontia. (Or $5,500 for Elise)
I understand that orthodontics can take time to work, and depend on my cooperation. My treatment can take up to 10 years to complete.
I have no say in what methods are used.

Permission to Treat
It is my understanding that Dr. Brandt’s office and treatment models have been created to help patients who were having trouble under normal orthodontic and dental practices. This includes procedures, appliances, braces, etc. We will work hand in hand to reach a pristine level of hygiene and aesthetics. After all, teamwork makes the dream work.

A tear escaped Elise’s eyes. Why in the bloody hell did she not read this contract through? She wasn’t a problem patient! Surely, she would just need a retainer, right? At most, she would need braces for a year or something.

Elise’s voice was small as she tried to reason with Dr. Brandt. “Dr. I didn’t realize that you only treated patients with issues um...committing. I-I don’t want to impose on your other patients.”

Dr. Brandt smiled as the molds of her mouth were brought in by Kara. Why were there three molds? Dr. Brandt brought all three over. “Elise, all of my new patients do not leave until the problems they come in with are addressed. “ He positions the tray so Elise can see it clearly. “You signed the contracts, so unless you can pay to get out of them, I will address your issues.”

She numbly nodded and a few tears trickled as Dr. Brandt talked on. Hannah rescheduled everyone for Dr. Brandt’s next free day. “These were your teeth age twelve, this one is your teeth at the end of your treatment with Uncle Roman, and this is today.” He makes a disappointed face and scoots to the right of his patient. The chair adjusts and he picks up a mirror. Hannah comes back in and quietly sits at the computer station ready to type.

DB: “Okay, Elise open, please.”

She swallows hard and shakes her head no, still in shock. Why would she do this to herself?

DB: “Listen, dear. I don’t want to force you to open that mouth of yours, but I will. We’re on the same team, here Elise.” 

Elise opens and silently cries as Dr. Brandt lays out a treatment plan to Hannah who happily typed. She couldn’t understand what he was talking about. “You know Elise if you would’ve just worn that retainer we could have avoided this. I’m very disappointed. “ Elise tries to say sorry, but no one can understand her. The Dr. looks to Hannah and points somewhere that Elise can’t see. “Hannah, I need you to get this for me, and if Kara hasn’t left yet, I need her too.” Elise cries harder and Dr. Brandt just moves the tray over her chest.

“Oh, Elise, I know shh… It’s frustrating to let yourself down. We’ll get it right this time. You’ll do great today, yeah?” Before she can answer, Hannah holds a gas mask to her nose and forces her to breathe. Kara is there to hold Elise’s hands to her chest. She tries to soothe her as a lips spreader is forced. “Sweetie it’s Kara. Shhh...You’re going to have such a great smile. I was in your shoes a few years ago.”

Dr. Brandt looks at her mouth more and tries to fit an appliance in as Elise slips into a chemically induced high. She notices that Kara stays to hold her hands as Dr. Brandt forces bands on her top teeth. Elise then tries to plead one last time. But it’s useless.

E:”I Uh eeeacher, eaase” (I’m a teacher, please!)

DB: “Then you will be a great example for those kids you teach! It’s just June, who knows how far you’ll be by September!”

A blue light flashes here and there and Elise has trouble keeping track of time, or how much is going into her mouth. Hannah smiled; she loved watching her husband take care of those who can’t take of themselves. She passed him a Herbst and couldn’t help but blush. How did she get so lucky?

Elise was once again a sobbing mess in this office, but instead of an angry little girl, she was a 26-year-old new teacher who now had a mouthful of metal.


After three hours of adjusting, gluing, and crying, Hannah held a mirror for Elise so that the damage could be seen. Dr. Brandt slowly brought her back to reality with oxygen. Pulling back her lip he pointed to each addition to her smile.

Dr. Brandt: “We have a herbst, bands on all teeth except those front ones. You decide if you get the rest in bands or they stay as brackets. You also have a bottom expander and these” He moved the mirror so she could see the bite blocks on the backs of her top teeth. He then without warning cupped her chin and turned the expander twice. Elise whimpered and slid down a little. “Elise I want this turned in the morning and before bed”.Dr. Brandt smiled a little at this and they let her sit up.

Kara walked her out, and at the door turned to her and warned, “You have to be back here in four weeks. I suggest you read what you’ve signed.”

E: “How long will my treatment be?”

 Her hand flew to her mouth hearing her garbled voice

Kara::” We don’t talk time frames here, Elise. We just operate on teamwork. You get better with flossing, okay?”

When Elise left the office it was 5pm. She’d spent her entire day at the dentist and was sore and exhausted. She was tempted to call her mom for comfort, but she felt like her mom would just be disappointed in her. She was a tough lady, and wasn’t the warmest.

When Elise had braces as a teen and would sob because of the severity of the treatment, her mom would roll her eyes and tell her to deal. After all, she and her dad did as kids.

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« Reply #21 on: 31. December 2020, 01:01:28 AM »
Very nice. Heheheh, this is only the beginning of the nightmare/dream depending on who you ask, i'd say.~

(Ooh, headgear round 2?~ ;) )

Hmm, one thing to keep in mind, is that stories that involve.. "involuntary" or.. "forced".. braces tend to be removed/locked, sadly. :(
It's a fine line between contract/legal/voluntary/ what you've got here,(Which is well written)  and something that breaks forum rules.. Just be careful, okay?


I like where this is going, of course.~ Lots of potential.

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« Reply #22 on: 31. December 2020, 01:41:00 AM »
If it does end up violating forum rules, I am always willing to add the rest of the story to TheArchive. I am more flexible because my collection is not directly linked to a website like most others.


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« Reply #23 on: 31. December 2020, 02:46:16 AM »
I knew I was probably towing a line... This will absolutely be rectified smoothly :) if you have an idea message me

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« Reply #24 on: 31. December 2020, 02:48:26 AM »
I knew I was probably towing a line... This will absolutely be rectified smoothly :) if you have an idea message me

Well, it's a good story so far, don't get me wrong, just something to keep in mind.  :)

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« Reply #25 on: 31. December 2020, 22:35:12 PM »
This is great so far! I can't wait to see where it goes.

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Part 4: Pino Dreams


It was dark in her apartment when her phone was ringing. She felt for it and in doing so was successful in knocking over an empty bottle of wine. She groaned and put her hand to her head. Yep, definitely hung over. When she answered the phone a perky voice was on the other line.

K: "Good morning Elise this is Kara with Dr. Brandt's office. Did you have time to come in a little early today? We have a cancellation and it was the appointment just before yours. With you being a new patient we want to take our time and make you comfortable."

Elise was so confused. She looked at her phone quickly seeing it was just the morning after making her appointment. It had been an awful dream! She sighed in sweet relief licking her smooth teeth then rubbed her eyes as she spoke.

E: "Of course. I will absolutely be there."

She got off the phone with Kara and then took a shower. It wasn't the first time she'd polished off a bottle of pino while binging on a good show, and she knew it wouldn't be her last. The dreams from these little episodes were always quite intense. She checked her phone again and took ibuprofen as and drank gatorade then spent the rest of the morning cleaning herself up and relaxing. 

She was feeling so much better as she drove to Dr. Brandt's office. Unlike her dream, the GPS lead her to an office building that was just downtown and it was very nice. She opened the door and saw a cozy office that had some dated furniture in the waiting room. Kara was at the reception desk like in her dream and her picture on the practice's website. She signed in and sat taking in her surroundings. “No Dr. Roman..thank goodness,” Elise thought to herself.

There was a man there playing on a phone. In the background, she heard a bit of what she thought was crying. A teen boy was escorted out by a beautiful man in his 30s. The man had jeans and an old-fashioned dentist's shirt that buttoned to the neck and the name tag read Dr. Brandt. He pointed to the poor teen's mouth as he spoke.

DB: “As you can see we do force participation in the treatment here with bands and older appliances that force Alex to be compliant in treatment this time. If he does as asked I will use something other than headgear after his 6th adjustment in 6 months."

The dad thanked him, and Dr. Brandt walked to reception. Kara smiled up at him then pointed at Elise who was pretending to play on her phone and wishing her feet would move so she could leave.

Dr. Brandt smiled a perfect blinding smile and went to her. He held out his hand and Elise gave him a firm handshake. "Elise, thanks for accommodating us. I'm Dr. Brandt, and my assistant Hannah and I ready for you dear." She sheepishly followed the young doctor looking around the office that was small and very clean. She was taken to a private room that had an older fashioned dental chair. There were models of appliances and braces with patient’s before compliance and after compliance photos.

The assistant Hannah got x-rays of Elise’s teeth then got her situated in the chair. Dr. Brandt then took photos of her mouth and laid out tools. He smiled down at her and once the chair was reclined, she was given sunglasses and a bib.

Dr. Brandt pressed down Elise’s chin gently and started to immediately do a check-up. “Elise, with it being your first appointment I like to fix any issues you may have with your teeth this first appointment and get full records.”  She nodded and gave a half-hearted grunt. She gripped the chair as Dr. Brandt’s explorer stuck into her sore tooth. Dr. Brandt sighed as his pick stuck several more times.

Dr. Brandt then began to rattle off a lot of terms to Hannah who typed and then began to clean her teeth. Dr. Brandt started to look at paper work as Hannah roughly cleaned Elise’s sore teeth.

DB: “Elise, you have five cavities. The one causing trouble will, unfortunately, need a root canal, so does the one next to it. Hannah, let’s get her set up with that.”

Before Elise could relax, q-tips were being placed against her bottom left molars. Dr. Brandt scooted so that Elise’s head was on his lap. She looked up at him scared with large blue eyes, and she closed them tight as he injected lidocaine.

She was sat up and Hannah gave her a mirror. Hannah smiled showing full banded braces and a maze of elastics. Dr. Brandt scoots to Elise’s side and encourages her to look at her teeth. “Elise dear, I noticed that your bite is really off. Smile big for me. “ She does so and sees that her molars aren’t setting right.. “Do you get headaches? It seems you had braces before.”

She drooled a little bit and Hannah took the mirror as Dr. Brandt reclined the beautiful Elise. “Hannah, let’s get these teeth fixed up and I’ll talk to Miss Elise about our options for her in a moment.”

The root canals and fillings weren’t very comfortable and during them Elise found herself tearing up once or twice. She could also hear another woman bringing in tools and setting something up. When the chair was sat up, Dr. Brandt was pulling off his gloves. He then moved a computer screen so she could see it.

Elise held her cheek and sighed, “do I need more work done, Dr.?” Elise chuckled some hearing her numb mouth attempt to make words.

Dr. Brandt smiled, “As I pointed out, your bite is really off. Your paperwork says that you had Dr. Roman as an orthodontist. I know from personal experience that he sees that retainers are worn. Did you go through with your follow-ups with him?”
Elise teared up and shook her head no. She told him of her experience and didn’t notice Dr. Brandt looking through her file more.

“Elise, I want to fix this for you. I see that you filed a waiver for orthodontics; were you wanting to fix your bite and maybe straighten those bottom teeth out?” Elise looked down at her shoes as the pain from her dental work set in.

“What does that look like, Dr? I don’t want to have it be like last time with Dr. Roman.”

Dr. Brandt smiled, trying to be reassuring. “Well, we are a compliance-based practice which means metal braces and I will use appliances. Open best you can.”

She opens for him and he looks and gives diagnosis. “I would place a full set of braces top and bottom. We would start with a herbst then go from there with treatment. Elise this would help a lot with jaw problems down the road, and help you to get less cavities because your teeth will be straightening out up front.” She nodded and sighed.

E: “Dr, how long would treatment be?”

DB: “ We don’t talk time tables here, but I bet it won’t take too long.”

E: “No headgear?”

DB: “I will never promise timelines or appliances needed or not needed. I know that you’re an adult, but I believe that patients, whether teen or adult do better when the Dr. takes full control. Tell you what, we have tortured you enough today. Here’s my card and if you need anything at all, you text me day or night. You’d make a great adult orthodontic case for my site.”

Elise practically leaped from the chair and half-listened as Hannah explained after care to her. Dr. Brandt waved at her on the way out and looked at Kara their young receptionist. “I do hope that I can get her for a public case. Come on you, let’s look at getting that expander adjusted.” She walked back to the chair as Hannah locked the office.

Kara was 25 years old and was a long term compliance patient. When she was 17 her mother took her to an orthodontist who got so frustrated with her that he dismissed Kara as a patient after a year when she was referred to Dr. Brandt who has been her orthodontist for the last seven years. She sobbed as she saw Dr. Brandt uncover a tray holding a mountain of metal.


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« Reply #27 on: 03. January 2021, 11:15:57 AM »
I like how you did that. It was very nice how the dream was so on the edge and her actual appointment was gentle.

The ending leaves us wondering what will be next.

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« Reply #28 on: 03. January 2021, 19:03:59 PM »
I like how you did that. It was very nice how the dream was so on the edge and her actual appointment was gentle.

The ending leaves us wondering what will be next.

Thank you!!!

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« Reply #29 on: 11. January 2021, 17:23:55 PM »
Excellent story! Keep up the good work

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« Reply #30 on: 11. January 2021, 21:25:23 PM »
I’m looking forward to Kara’s treatment

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« Reply #31 on: 13. January 2021, 22:19:21 PM »
I’m looking forward to Kara’s treatment

Oh, I have plans for her, the poor thing.

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« Reply #32 on: 13. January 2021, 23:13:28 PM »
Part 5: The Worst Case Scenario

Dr. Brandt stroked Kara's cheek that was wet with tears. "Shhh... it's okay yeah? We're just going to look then choose what to use. I think we may be getting to the end yeah? Now I just need you to open for me love." Kara sniffed and opened allowing Hannah to place a lip spreader.

Dr. Brandt looked at his handy work and nodded then picked up a lower expander and began to install it. He and Hannah ignored Kara's pleading for him not to do an expander again. "Kara darling, I've made your top jaw a little too wide.. let's have the bottom match up. I will turn it every morning before we open, okay?" Kara nodded as silent tears stained her cheeks.  "Kara this is the last turn of the top expander. I'll keep it in for a few months for retention". He then picked up a forsus appliance. Kara had grown to have quite the overbite in her almost decade of treatment. Her mother allowed Dr. Brandt to experiment with different appliances on her, and now he had to fix the damage done by them.

DB: "Let's switch her to brackets, Hannah.  I think that she's ready."

H: "Yes, Dr. would you like power chains?"

DB: "Maybe next appointment. Let's definitely do wire ligatures."

They worked hours on poor Kara. She hadn't had actual brackets since she was 17 and was elated to actually see parts of her teeth. The worst part however, was that her teeth had several cavities from being banded so long. She was immediately scheduled for hours of fillings to happen that weekend.

A week after her appointment, Elise was sitting at her computer researching headaches being connected to jaw alignment. She sighed realizing it was an actual thing, and that she may have to fix it. She wasn't married or dating so it's not like there was anyone to impress, but she also wanted to date some.

"Maybe it won't look so bad", She thought scrolling through the internet looking at adults with braces. Her ex-boyfriend got them when he was 30 to fix his front teeth, and only wore them a few months. Maybe her treatment could be like that too.

She looked at the website for Dr. Brandt and read the orthodontic plan. "We work with patients to give them a smile and health that will last a lifetime. Team work makes the dream work and our patients are proof!"

She wrote a text to Dr. Brandt asking if she would have to wear bands or brackets and what treatment would look like. It's just asking, right?

Dr. Brandt text her back within minutes telling her to come in the next day at 11 a.m. as he didn't like giving treatment plans without the patient in front of him.

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« Reply #33 on: 01. February 2021, 16:31:04 PM »
Part 6: Name on the line please

Elise found herself on her day off laying horizontal and looking around the room as Dr. Brandt looked in her mouth. A full orthodontic exam was carried out, and when he was done he sat her up but not all the way.

DB: Elise, I think that with braces and a herbst that we can make those headaches go away. If you decide to go through with treatment, it'll be in line with the adult voluntary compliance plan.

E: w-what's that?

She doesn't notice the spacers That Hannah was pouring out onto the tray at her chest.

DB: Well, we don't do ceramic braces or invisalign. You'd begin with regular brackets on your front teeth top and bottom and all your molars would be fitted with bands. This is only so we can anchor any appliances we see fit, or may be use for anchorage. I would also like to document your treatment and not use your name and face.

Elise nodded and put her hands into her hoodie pocket.

E: When do we do it? I know you won't mention time frames, but I'm a teacher so I wanted to make sure it wouldn't interfere.

Dr. Brandt nodded as an impression was taken. Hannah cleaned Elise up then Dr. Brandt rolled his stool so that he could face her.

DB: Absolutely understandable. I know that with braces it can be a rough start, but I also know that your treatment will whiz by if you're compliant. I will do my best to make your treatment meet your effort.

Elise bit her lip and let out a sigh..This would benefit her health, and Dr. Brandt wasn't forceful.

E: What the hell, let's do it.

Dr. Brandt and Hannah nodded and smiled. Kara the receptionist was brought in a thick contract.

K: This is your treatment contract. I will make copies for you while you get started. Sign on the line please.

Elise did as told and felt nervous. "Get started?" She asked as Dr. Brandt picked up a mirror.

DB: Spacers and brackets today and then in a week you come in for a two hour appointment for placement.

E hesitated and then let the doctor begin. He shoved in 12 spacers total, and the brackets he placed were very large. Elise made a small face when he placed a wire and the discomfort from the spacers set it.

DB: You are all done my dear. Just ibuprofen for discomfort. Don't floss where those spacers are.

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« Reply #34 on: 02. February 2021, 23:54:43 PM »
Looking forward to the rest of the treatment

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« Reply #35 on: 03. February 2021, 17:03:32 PM »
Always enjoy your writings.  I enjoy the other character development also, gives it a wide lense view. Keep it up.

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« Reply #36 on: 10. March 2021, 15:28:13 PM »
This was getting good, I hope you will continue!

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« Reply #37 on: 19. March 2021, 04:01:10 AM »
Wouldn't mind seeing this continued, yes.

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« Reply #38 on: 22. March 2021, 21:28:37 PM »
please continue :)

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« Reply #39 on: 06. April 2021, 05:58:10 AM »
Part 7: Awesome.

I do apologize for the wait. I write for my job too, so it's been a little crazy.


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The week with just her spacers and brackets up front had been really weird for Elise. She had to go to her school to clean up and decorate her classroom, and and hour didn't go by without someone poking in their head and gasping at her new smile. She felt humiliated, and very self conscious by the time for her next appointment came.

Her hands shook as she sat in Dr. Brandt's waiting room. She heard sobbing from the back, and soon tears were appearing in her own eyes as Hannah the assistant from last time came to the door calling her name.

H: Nervous for today?

Elise nods as she's lead back to a chair. She sits and sees that the tray is covered and that there is a gas tank at the back of the chair.

E: w-was that tank always in here?

Hannah ignores the question and smiles as the bib is placed around Elise's neck. Dr. Brandt comes in and plops down her file on the table behind them. He pulls on his mask and black gloves as Hannah reclines Elise.

Dr. Brandt smiled behind his mask, the light behind him almost putting him in silhouette. He wanted to make sure that Elise was comfortable for this very long appointment today.

Dr. Brandt placed the gas mask on Elise's nose and Hannah turned the gas up. Elise's eyes shot open and she tried to wiggle away.

Dr. Brandt cooed to her, making her calm some. "Elise, this is just to help with nerves. We always use it when we have a lot of bands to place. All you have to do is breathe through your nose and relax. Hannah and I will do all the tough stuff"

Elise took a few breaths and began to calm down as her eyes drooped but never closed. Hannah smoothly was able to place a retractor, as Dr. Brandt began shoving on the first of several bands. The ones closer to the front had brackets on them. Elise giggled a bit as they worked.

"My teeth will be pretty now?" She asked, feeling the full effects of the gas as quickly her smile became more and more metallic.

Hannah smiled rubbing her hand and nodded, "Yep and in a few years your teeth will be perfect!"

Dr. Brandt and Hannah chatted away for hours as a herbst appliance was placed. The massive appliance caused Elise to give a confused look, but the gas made her not care.

When she was given color choices for her ties, she chose silver, and she began to wince in discomfort as the nitrous surging through the mask turned into oxygen. Hannah held a mirror above her face after Dr. Brandt clipped the wires in the back. "Anything poking, Miss Elise?" He asked, sitting her up. Elise shook her head no as fat tears started to roll down her cheeks.

The herbst made her look like a chipmunk in her opinion, and she couldn't believe how much metal seemed to be in her mouth. She was struck silent and put the mirror down on the tray that was connected to her chair. When Dr. Brandt let her up, he walked her to Kara who had considerably smaller braces than the last time that Elise had been in.

"Alright, Elise. You call with any questions...ibuprofen for pain, and be sure to practice talking with that herbst okay? I'll see you in six weeks." He patted her shoulder as Kara pulled up the office's calendar. "You did great today!"