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Offline panda777

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Story: Pearl and Flossie
« on: 07. December 2019, 08:12:18 AM »
This is a kind of prequel chapter to a story based on a post I made in the "office of your dream" thread that I've been thinking about writing. I changed some slight details like making the characters a bit younger, but other than that I hope you like it. Let me know if you would want to see more.

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It had been almost 10 years since Quinn had lived in her hometown. After graduating high school she had immediately gone to college to study architecture and then lived with her boyfriend in Chicago only returning for brief visits. However, after their nasty breakup, she decided to move back to the very small town in Virginia she had come from. It was almost as she remembered. One thing she did notice was how many more people seemed to walk around smiling. And not only that, they all seemed to have impressive Hollywood smiles, much more than you would expect from such a small town in the middle of nowhere.

After a week or two back, she had lunch with a childhood friend, Charlotte. Charlotte seemed the same as always, as they had kept in touch the past several years, with one major difference. When she sat down and smiled, she had a mouthful of orthodontia that seemed out of place with the rest of her fashionable self. Quinn was surprised. "Your teeth were already fine, do you really need them?" Charlotte laughed. "I guess you noticed." She bared her teeth, showing the full glory of her metal mouth. Not only was she not wearing Invisalign, they were chunky and made of metal, almost completely covering her teeth, with a set of pink rubber bands tying her top teeth to her bottom. "It's a bit of a long story. Do you remember Dr. Whites?"

Dr. Whites and his wife, who went by Dr. Mary, were the only dentists in town when Quinn and Charlotte were growing up. Their office was a converted home that they still lived in the top floor of. "They retired a few years ago." Charlotte continued. "But their daughter took over the practice. Remember Pearl?" Quinn vaguely remembered Pearl Whites, who went to school with them. Perhaps it was because her parents were feared and resented by the local children, or because she was a strange-looking nerdy girl who always talked about science, but Pearl didn't seem to have many friends growing up. "She's still a general dentist, but she also specializes in orthodontics. Remember those big metal braces her parents made her wear in high school?" Quinn chuckled, even though Charlotte's braces were probably more noticeable than Pearl's ever were. "Anyway, apparently she's actually very successful in her field. She graduated dental school early, and wrote a bunch of papers on orthodontics before working here. But now she's doing a study on women 25-35, and giving free treatment to any willing participants."

"And you agreed? Why?" Quinn raised an eyebrow. "Well, the study only lasts a couple months, apparently her methods work very fast. But the results are so surprising. It's like if someone's teeth are 80 percent perfect to begin with, she can bring them up to 100, and they come out looking like a celebrity! And to be honest, it would get her to stop pestering me at every appointment." She rolled her eyes at the last point. "But you'd be surprised, almost every girl we went to school with has had them by now, it's like she's finally popular a decade later." Quinn raised an eyebrow again. "Well I'm not getting them, that's for sure." Charlotte chuckled, showing another rubber and metal smile. "Suit yourself then."


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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #1 on: 07. December 2019, 09:08:04 AM »
Great start! I'm looking forward to more :)

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #2 on: 07. December 2019, 09:44:31 AM »
I would definitely like to see more of this story.

It is nice to see a new writer adding to the collection of stories here.

Stretch out the story a little and add some detail to it. Write what you feel and write for yourself. Don't worry about the rest of us. I will always appreciate when someone writes a story. It is always interesting to see what is in the minds of other people.

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #3 on: 07. December 2019, 15:14:37 PM »
Awesome start

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #4 on: 08. December 2019, 02:52:03 AM »
nice nice  :)

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #5 on: 08. December 2019, 04:55:26 AM »
Great start! Look forward to seeing more

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #6 on: 08. December 2019, 08:08:18 AM »
Thanks for the great story!

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #7 on: 08. December 2019, 09:57:39 AM »
I am glad you seemed to like the first part. Here is part two.

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Over the next few months, Quinn seemed to notice more and more women around town with the same beaming perfect smiles, and if not that, they had the same grisly steel appliances as Charlotte. It was almost like a zombie apocalypse, and sometimes Quinn even thought she noticed judgmental looks when people saw her unbraced yet apparently less than perfect smile. Eventually, Charlotte got her braces off.

They met again for lunch, and Quinn almost didn't recognize her. It wasn't just that Quinn had gotten used to the braces, but Charlotte's new smile made her look like a whole new person. Her teeth were not only perfectly straight and aligned, but her teeth were so white they seemed to glow. It was like they had completely changed the shape of her face.

"Wow, you really do look great" Quinn admitted. Charlotte gave a stunning smile. "Thanks, I've been getting that a lot. It's not just the braces, she and her hygienist are really great at helping with cleaning and whitening. Have you met them yet?" Quinn rolled her eyes. "I'm not exactly jumping at the chance to go to the dentist. And I'm definitely not becoming one of Pearl Whites' dental lab rats or whatever." Charlotte smirked. "Well, that's fair enough. Though Pearl isn't as bad as her parents. I almost look forward to her appointments." Quinn sighed. It had been a while since she had seen a dentist though.

When she got home, she looked up nearby dentists. She groaned when the Whites office was still the only one in town. It did have five star ratings everywhere she checked online though. Reluctantly, she called the number on the website. A strange lispy voice answered, and helped schedule an appointment for the following Friday.

When the day came, Quinn found herself nervously biting her lip on the way to the old Whites office. Childhood memories came flooding back of the constant sound of drilling, with Dr. Mary barking her infamous rants on proper flossing and the evils of soda pop that could be heard from the waiting room. Quinn did not envy the patients with braces, who were taken to a special room in the back of the house for their treatments, and would complain at school about Dr. Whites' painful methods and Dr. Mary's strict rules. Except for Pearl of course, who worked as an assistant in her teenage years and wore her orthodontia with pride, excitedly repeating her mother's lectures to anyone who would listen.

Even though she swore she could smell the dentist office smell from down the street, the house did look nicer than she had remembered. A garden had been planted out front, a rainbow pride flag hung in an upstairs window, and a tooth shaped sign had been put up, showing the names Dr. Pearl E. Whites, DDS and Flossie Park, RDH.

Quinn took a deep breath and stepped inside. The door jingled as she walked in, and the same lispy voice told her to come over to the window. She noticed the waiting room had been updated from the dingy 80's decor, and actually had a pleasant minty smell, with pop music quietly playing in the background. But what she saw in the window almost made her run away.

A woman in her late 20's sat at the window. She was somewhat busty, and wore a tight white buttoned dental uniform. Her hair was dyed blonde and was tied in pigtails with pink scrunchies. Her nails were were painted pink, and her earrings were shaped like tiny teeth. She also had pink eyeshadow and gorgeous red lipstick with a perky smile. However, her lips awkwardly rested around the objects of Quinn's horror. Jutting from the corners of her mouth were a set of metal bars, reaching around her face and connecting to pink cloth straps on the back of her neck and top of her head. Also coming from her lips were a set of blue rubber bands, connecting to another metal device in front of her mouth, this one framing her face with metal bars, connecting a white plastic cup on her chin to a light blue plastic pad on her forehead.

"You mutht be Quinn!" The woman smiled, revealing a set of pink, white, and blue braces, with an intricate set of matching rubber bands. Her voice was very high pitched, but as she spoke Quinn noticed the bars from the corner of her mouth were actually a pair, one on the top teeth and one on the bottom, which moved apart as she spoke. She held out her hand and Quinn awkwardly shook it. "I'm Flothie, the dental hygienitht." Flossie must have noticed the look on Quinn's face and giggled. "Right, the headgear. Patienth rarely get prethcribed anything like thith, and only have to wear it at night. I wear mine at work, it feelth appropriate for a dental offithe." It was hard to understand Flossie as she spoke through her orthodontia, and Quinn was almost hypnotized by the way the appliances moved when she talked. "I'll take you in, Dr. Whiteth wath very ecthited to hear you were coming!" Flossie gestured to a hallway and Quinn nervously followed.

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #8 on: 08. December 2019, 10:37:51 AM »
Great story, can’t wait for the rest of it.

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #9 on: 08. December 2019, 16:33:45 PM »
Nice Story!  :)

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #10 on: 08. December 2019, 17:54:01 PM »
Great start, keep up the good work :)

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #11 on: 08. December 2019, 19:57:08 PM »
I like where this is going!!

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #12 on: 08. December 2019, 20:19:26 PM »
Beautifully written thus far. Really immersive and fun to think what happens next.

Would be a shame if Quinn gets 'extra special' treatment. The hygienist's headgear sounds very interesting indeed!

Honestly, love the build up thus far. Thanks for writing (amd sharing!).

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #13 on: 08. December 2019, 20:30:08 PM »
This is a really nice Story. Looking forward what happened next

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Re: Story: Pearl and Flossie
« Reply #14 on: 09. December 2019, 02:43:00 AM »
I like where this story is heading. Please add some more to it.

Thank you for keeping your story in the same thread and for labelling it as part 2. It makes it easier to keep all the parts in the correct order.

I would like your permission to add it to TheArchive. I always try and get permission from the author before I add new stories. I respect the amount of time it takes to write a story and don't want to 'steal' an author's work.

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