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Offline artemisprime

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Story: Odontophobia
« on: 16. July 2021, 08:52:38 AM »
Hi! My name is Artemis and I'm new to the group. After reading Pearl and Flossie I was inspired to join the forum and start writing myself! Thanks Panda! Anyways, the other day I went to the orthodontist for the first time in a while and it inspired me to write a very specific type of story. I hope you all enjoy it and, without further to do, here it is!

Chapter 1 - Odontophobia

I cannot remember a single visit do the dentist that did not end with me crying. After a bad experience when I was really young I have always been scared of dentists. They haven't caused me pain and haven't done anything that would hurt since that one time when I was 4. But still, at 18, I end up crying at regular cleanings. My friends were always supportive of me and I often made them come with me for support during the visits. My regular dentist, Dr. Kim was always nice to me. She was around 40 and had short, straight hair, always in a half pony tail tied with a pink band. Her scrubs were a shade of light blue and fit loosely around her. I actually liked her as a person and always felt really bad for her. I always thought she hated me for being so annoying, but she always understood my situation.

During my last cleaning, I managed to not cry until the very end, a really big achievement for me, but after taking her gloves off she didn't raise the chair like she usually did. "Can you wait here for a second? I need to call someone I'll be right back" she said calmly as she exit the room. My heart began pounding in my chest and I started to sweat profusely. I was terrified of having more procedures done and I had already held out from crying for enough, I just wanted to go home. She returned with my dental records in her hand. She finally lift the chair up and showed them to me. "Abby you already know your teeth are crooked, but we didn't put braces because of your situation, right?". I nodded, too nervous to speak. "Well I just called an orthodontist that I feel you need to see. These new X-rays just came in and they show your jaw is shifting to the left. That can cause your teeth to wear down faster than they should, and I know you don't like dentists but this is going to become a problem that will be more painful if we don't deal with it now. Your crowding has also led to poor hygiene. You don't have cavities yet, but its better to prevent them". I was speechless. Although not my worst fear, braces were especially scary because of how many visits per year one has to go to. I swallowed again and spoke. "W-When d-do I have to s-see him?" I stuttered my words, almost choking on them. "Well today is a Friday... 15th 16th..." she calculated in her head "Saturday! Oh that's tomorrow!" she chuckled, as if remembering how a week's days went. "Tomorrow at 2, it's by Grant Station" I stood up to leave before she stopped me "One last thing, her name is Dr. Aziz. We're good buddies, that's why you got in soon after talking to her. Her waitlist is a bit long and I didn't want to make you wait". I hugged her before leaving. She had always been so nice to me and always accommodated for me and now she had taken my fears into account. I was still nervous but that made me feel a little better.

Saturday came and I followed the directions Dr. Kim gave me to the office. I got off at Grant Station and walked about 5 minutes to the office. I stood in front of it and checked my phone. "1:47" I stood outside frozen. My mom had to go to the office that day and I had to come alone, none of my friends made it. I stood there, waiting. I finally managed to build up some courage to go inside and opened the doors. The reception was really soothing. It was painted a really pastel shade of pink and had comfortable chairs instead of the usual office ones my usual dentist has. No one was around so I just sat down and looked at my phone, texting my friends for moral support. In walked the receptionist. She looked no older than me and was wearing beautiful white scrubs. You could definitely go out in those as everyday clothing. She looked familiar, almost as if I knew her. She looked at me and her eyes widened. "Abbigail Chen? What are you doing here?"

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Re: Story: Odontophobia
« Reply #1 on: 16. July 2021, 09:31:49 AM »
Oooh, this could be fun.~

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« Reply #2 on: 16. July 2021, 11:08:26 AM »
It's nice have another person join the group of writers. I would like your permission to add your story to TheArchive.

If you don't know, I have the largest collection of orthodontic stories that, i know of. I always try to ask the author for permission before adding their stories and sharing their stories with other people.

Offline artemisprime

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« Reply #3 on: 16. July 2021, 11:40:31 AM »
It's nice have another person join the group of writers. I would like your permission to add your story to TheArchive.

If you don't know, I have the largest collection of orthodontic stories that, i know of. I always try to ask the author for permission before adding their stories and sharing their stories with other people.

You have my permission. I hope you enjoyed this first part. I'll try to be consistent with part uploads ^^

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« Reply #4 on: 16. July 2021, 12:55:05 PM »
That's a great start, Artemisprime. Very intriguing!

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« Reply #5 on: 16. July 2021, 15:17:43 PM »
Good start! Keep it up.

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« Reply #6 on: 16. July 2021, 16:39:43 PM »
Really nice start for a story... Really interested how it will go on

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« Reply #7 on: 16. July 2021, 16:45:10 PM »
Thank you! And I love the story so far! The characters are so cute, and I love the descriptions of the uniforms! Poor Abby, I hope things go well for her!  ;)

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« Reply #8 on: 17. July 2021, 06:15:45 AM »
Nice job!  Looking forward to more!

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« Reply #9 on: 29. July 2021, 20:41:44 PM »
Can't wait to read more

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« Reply #10 on: 31. July 2021, 01:44:52 AM »
Great start!

Offline artemisprime

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« Reply #11 on: 31. July 2021, 09:42:04 AM »
I'm glad you're all enjoying the story. Sorry I was gone, summer has been crazy for me. Anyways here's chapter 2. I'll try to write more often, its really fun. What do you all think of Abby, isn't she adorable? Enough talking! Enjoy this chapter!

Chapter 2 - At the office

It finally clicked. It was none other than Melanie White. She was wearing her hair in a messy bun and I didn’t recognize her. She was also wearing a light pink uniform that fit nicely on her. She’s one of my best friends and always came with me to my appointments when I was scared. “Why are you here?” she seemed confused while asking “I thought you opted out of braces years ago”. I sighed “Apparently my jaw is shifting and I need to correct my crowding, but I am really scared Mel. Why are you here?” I asked her back “I’ve been working here during the summer, my aunt is friends with Dr Aziz”.

I sat down and put my phone away, Melanie sat next to me. “It’s going to be okay Abby, Dr. Aziz is really good but I should warn you…”. A chill went down my spine. “Warn me about what?” I asked, managing to not stutter “She isn’t as tactful as Dr. Kim and you have to be prepared for that”. I shivered as I heard that. I still panicked and cried with Dr. Kim and she always went above and beyond to make me feel comfortable. Not being cared for was really scary for me.

 “Wait I don’t understand. Why are you working at an orthodontist office?” I asked Melanie, who looked down almost ashamed. “I want to become a dentist. Its been like that for a while and I want to make the experience better for people like you who are scared. I’ve learned a lot because of you and I feel like I could make a difference”. She giggled, a little ashamed, while saying this. “I never knew. You didn’t tell me because of my phobia right?”. She nodded in agreement. We were both going into the same university and she probably thought I’d be afraid of her if she told me she was studying dentistry. She actually told me she was an undeclared major. We even applied for a dorm together. She must’ve been scared.

The sound of clicking heels interrupted our conversation, they echoed from the exam room as they approached the waiting area. A middle eastern woman emerged from the little hall that led to the room. She was wearing a lab coat over a red summer dress. She was wearing matching red lipstick and thick eyeliner. “Abbigail Chen? Please come in” she said in a neutral tone “Y-Yes?” I answered “Please come on in, we’re ready for you. I see you’ve met Melanie already, She will be assisting me today so I’m glad you both know each other now. Follow me please”

She walked back to the office, expecting us both to go, but I just froze. Melanie took me by the hand, looked at me, and smiled. Her smile was beautiful, her fangs flared out in the cutest of ways. Mine however was horrid. My front teeth were crooked in the most extreme of ways, to the point where my two front teeth were on top of each other. I admired her smile for a moment and then got up and followed her.

We walked through a little hallway and finally arrived in the exam room. The room was minimalistic in its decor. It had a couple of posters for orthodontics and the chair in the middle but it was pretty bare, the walls the same blue shade as the outside. There were cabinets on the walls and under one of them was a small table that was empty when we came in. The chair was fairly nice, a shade of pink to contrast the blue on the walls. It had an instrument tray and in it laid multiple pliers and explorers that sent a shiver down my spine. I sat in the chair by instinct and tried to relax. Dr. Aziz turned the chair light on and shined it into my mouth. I began to tremble and sweat. She didn’t seem to mind and ignored most of my signs, something I was rather grateful for. Melanie clipped a bib on me and reclined the chair halfway. “Alright Abby” Dr. Aziz told me “I’m Amira Aziz and I’ll be your orthodontist today. We have a lot of work to do today so I’m going to explain all that I will do right now. Is that okay?” I began to breathe heavily. I nodded. “Alright first I need to take photos of your mouth for your records and then I have to put braces on you. You also need spacers for your over-jet”. That’s as much as I remembered from what she said. I was paralyzed, I couldn’t move and a tear ran down my cheek. I was so scared.

After she took the photos she brought in a tray with what she was going to work with that day. “Melanie I’m going to do some paperwork I’m backed on, do you mind prepping Abby for me?” Melanie looked at me with a look of pity “No problem Dr. Aziz” she said as she snapped gloves on and adjusted the lights. “You’re going to be okay and you’re going to look amazing. I’ll be super careful and you know me. It will all be okay” she said placing her hand over mine.

She went to the tray and began assembling a red cheek retractor in front of me. “This is a NOLA dry field retractor. Its a mouthful with the tongue guard but that way you don’t have to keep your mouth wide open” she said as she showed it to me. “I und-understand” I said. I felt more calm with Melanie working on me. She was being so nice and calm, she really did learn a lot when I ranted about her and when she consoled me all those visits. “Open wide for me Abby” she said, placing the retractor in front of my mouth. I opened up and prepared for my braces.

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« Reply #12 on: 31. July 2021, 12:05:19 PM »
I really do like this story and plese do continue.

But there is one point of caution that I'd like to raise: In this forum, there is a rule, that sories musn't contain violence, exploitation of a dependent person, or coercion.
This treatment progressing despite your main character's fear ("I was paralyzed") could be interpreteted as going against her wishes.
Since I don't want to see this story end  ;D , you might as well make it clear that she is still in control of what happens around her.
Just my humble opinion  >:D

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« Reply #13 on: 31. July 2021, 12:15:45 PM »
I really do like this story and plese do continue.

But there is one point of caution that I'd like to raise: In this forum, there is a rule, that sories musn't contain violence, exploitation of a dependent person, or coercion.
This treatment progressing despite your main character's fear ("I was paralyzed") could be interpreteted as going against her wishes.
Since I don't want to see this story end  ;D , you might as well make it clear that she is still in control of what happens around her.
Just my humble opinion  >:D

I see what you mean. In that section she is just shocked of what she's hearing. I didn't make that clear. But my plan is writing this as this being 100% her going to the treatments out of her own will despite having a big fear. Trying to face her fear and whatnot. Thanks for telling me tho!

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« Reply #14 on: 06. August 2021, 03:13:26 AM »
It's a nice touch having Melanie, her best friend, there to hold her hand and even prep her for the doctor!