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Offline CrowdedPrincess

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Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« on: 12. October 2022, 03:28:50 AM »
Hello! This is a new story I'm working on. I'll try to post at least once a week. Enjoy!

Chapter 1

I woke up and clumsily looked for my phone, eyes still closed. The alarm kept going until my fingers managed to find my phone and turn it off. I curled up in a ball as I slowly opened my eyes. Last night had been fun if I remembered correctly but a couple of cocktails in and the details get fuzzy. I picked my phone up and opened up my calendar just like any other day and looked through what I had to do that day. “Groceries, Coffee with Rose, Orthodontist appointment” I muttered to myself. I had completely forgotten the orthodontist was today.

Saving up during college was finally paying off, getting braces at 23 isn’t too bad, is it? I saved a portion of all my pay checks for this day. My teeth were very crooked. People found them cute but I found them annoying. Cleaning them was a hassle and they hurt when I bit down in certain ways. I’m surprised my parents never put me in braces when I was younger. My canines flared out noticeably and my front two teeth stuck out like a rabbit’s. I’d never been teased for them but they just made me feel insecure. Rose really likes my teeth. We’ve been seeing each other for a little and she always points out my silly teeth. Gosh, I love her. She almost makes me want to not fix my smile. Almost. Truth is my smile is actually actively hurting me since I have an overbite and at times my teeth dig into my gums.

I stood up and walked towards the bathroom. I looked at myself in the mirror and smiled, or at least tried to. My smile looked crooked to me, I didn’t like it. I pulled my cheeks back and admired the mess of clustered pearls in my mouth. If there was one thing I liked about my teeth it was their colour. They had always been pearly white, not that unnatural enamel colour celebrities seem to love, real tooth white. Healthy and natural. I picked up my toothbrush and began brushing my teeth. I didn’t think much of this particular tooth brushing. I walked out of the bathroom and got dressed. I picked up my bag and my keys and walked out of my apartment. I didn’t think much of today’s tooth brushing. I would later come to find out that was my last tooth brushing without braces.

After doing groceries and putting them away I went to the cafe to meet Rose. I sat down in one of the tables and patiently waited for her to show up. She was always a bit late, but that was part of her charm. I liked that she kept me waiting for a little because I knew that no matter what she would always end up showing up.
“Boo!” I jumped and screamed before quickly covering my mouth. “Hey there Athena” she said.
“You idiot! Everybody’s staring!” I said laughing and hugging her.
“With a face like that who couldn’t?”
“Stop it!” I said giggling and attempting to hide the obvious blush that was rushing to my cheeks.
“How are you feeling? I had a blast last night, we should definitely go out more often, I didn’t know you partied so hard”
“I usually don’t, but I figured after getting braces today I wouldn’t be able to show my face around anymore so…”
“Shut up! You’re sooo dramatic” she said, mocking me a little.
“I am” I replied, going along with her.
“You’ll be fine, why are you so worried anyways. We literally know at least 10 people who have braces, and some of them are older than you!”
“Well I don’t know. I already look pretty childish and I get ID’d at clubs and dispensaries every single time. A metal mouth is going to be humiliating when handing my ID to the bouncer or an employee. What if they think I’m a kid?”
“Lucky for you there’s this fun fun thing called a date of birth conveniently written on your ID” she said, mocking me again.
“You’re such a jerk” I said, tucking my hair behind my ear.
“The hottest jerk you’ve seen” she said, grinning at me.
Truth is, she was incredibly pretty, magazine pretty, but she wasn't a model or anything of the sort. She worked at this local art supply store so she got to dress however she wanted, unlike me and my restaurant job. I kinda envied her for that.
“So… how long until you have to leave me?” She said, faking sadness in her voice and pouting at me.
“Stop that!" I said, looking at my phone for the time "Uhm… about 5 minutes”
“Aw come on, and I was just starting to have fun” she said
“Too bad you can’t come with me” I said, standing up to leave
“I totally could! I have nothing to do later”
I tripped after hearing that. I quickly composed myself and stopped for a second. She couldn’t see me like that. It would be so embarrassing!
“No way! I'm going to be so nervous and look so ugly! Besides, they wouldn’t even let you go in with me because… because…”
Shit, I blanked.
“See? You can’t even come up with a good reason, besides were practically dating aren’t we?” she said, grabbing my hand and holding it tightly. Her hands were really warm. I tried to think of an excuse for her not to come but she was right, she regularly slept over at my place and I regularly slept over at hers. There was no real reason she couldn't come besides me being embarassed.
“Ugh fine, fine, fine” I said defeated “You can come, but only if you drive” I said handing her my keys. She snatched them from my hands and gave me a kiss. “Your wish is my command” she said opening the door to my car. I got in the car and she turned it on as I locked my door and put on my seatbelt. She took my face and pulled my lips apart with her fingers. “Shame that your teeth can’t stay like this, you know I really really like those bunny teeth of yours” I blushed and turned away for a bit. She pulled me back in and kissed be before she began driving. “Here we go!” She said enthusiastically.

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #1 on: 12. October 2022, 05:16:45 AM »
Love this so far! The characters are adorable, and I love the description of Athena's teeth! Can't wait to see what happens next!

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #2 on: 12. October 2022, 18:13:23 PM »
Good start!

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #3 on: 12. October 2022, 20:29:23 PM »
Agreed its a good start can't wait for more.

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #4 on: 12. October 2022, 23:21:43 PM »
Good start. Can’t wait for more. I like all the details you added!

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #5 on: 17. October 2022, 11:07:55 AM »
Chapter 2

We were in the car for ten minutes before arriving at the office. It was in a small strip mall, less than 10 stores in it. The orthodontist’s office was the largest of the buildings, which made sense since it was the most popular orthodontist in the area. It was targeted for all ages, a decisive factor when choosing which office I’d go to. I didn’t want to go to an adult only orthodontist, they usually don’t let you pick colours for your braces from what I read and I was a bit excited about that aspect. I didn’t want to show them to anyone but playing with the colours and building outfits at home with them sounded like a fun thing to do for the next couple months. Another factor was that, since the office catered to everyone it was bigger than all the others. The reception area was massive compared to the three-chairs-and-a-coffee-table decor that everyone else seemed to have going on.
“Are you ready?” Rose nudged me. I had become lost in thought for a minute there.
“Yeah” I took a deep breath and exhaled slowly “I’m ready”

We came out of the car and Rose locked it for me.
“Catch!” She threw my keys at me. They bounced in my hands a couple times before I finally caught them.
“Excellent catch, you should get into softball someday, I hear there’s a couple good leagues in town” she said sarcastically.
“Meanie” I replied.
She opened the door to the office for me and I walked inside. I finally got to see the reception area in person. It was pretty homey, a couple couches and wooden tables lined the reception area. It felt very open and it had accents of pink all over. A couple people were waiting in some of the couches but the office was relatively quiet. I walked up to the receptionist desk and was greeted by a girl that looked to be about my age.
“Hi, I have an appointment in around 10 minutes, I’m Athena. I think we spoke over the phone” I said, a bit nervous.
“Yes! I remember, gorgeous name!” She said enthusiastically. “Take a seat, were almost ready. Thanks for sending your most recent dental x-rays. That really makes things go faster on our end” she said while typing something into the computer on her desk. As she typed, her badge showed from under the jacket she was wearing. It read “Jocelyn”. Her hair was tied into a neat ponytail that showed briefly from behind her head when she turned around to grab a clipboard from under the desk. Her hair was dyed a hot pink.
“Glad I could be of help” I said, clenching my fists a little. My hands were wet, it was actually getting really nervous. I didn’t remember dentists being so stressful. Well, I guess orthodontists would be different, wouldn’t they?

She placed the clipboard in front of me and handed me a pen “We just need some more info in there, it shouldn’t be too much since we already took down a lot of information the other day” I took the pen and clipboard and thanked her. I turned around and went to a couch where Rose had been sitting. I didn’t even hear her sit down.
“What did she say?” Rose asked curiously
“She just gave me some forms to fill out”
“Scary stuff huh?”
“It’s just asking me for my phone number Rose, even I’m not scared enough to panic over that”
“But what if they give it to telemarketers?” Rose made a scared face and grabbed my arm
“Now that would be scary” I replied, going along with her jokes.
A voice cut through our conversation and we both turned towards it.

A woman stood at near the reception desk and picked up a clipboard from the desk. “Athena?” She said to the whole room. I started shaking a little. I took a deep breath and closed my eyes for a moment. I opened them back up and looked at her, standing up as I answered “that’s me”.
She smiled warmly at me, showcasing a very pretty smile, complimented by her gorgeous strawberry blonde hair going down half of her face. “I’m Dr. Aster, pleased to meet you. Come on in” she said, leading us to the back of the office “let’s discuss your treatment”


(Hi everyone! I hope you are all enjoying my story. I hope this is a pacing you all enjoy and I hope you like the story I've laid out for you all. Leave a comment on what you like in the story, I'll be sure to take note. I'll try to keep writing often. Until then, you'll probably see me roaming around the forum, hope to catch y'all there.

~Crowded Princess)

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #6 on: 17. October 2022, 14:16:59 PM »
Hi Crowdedprincess I like the story so far you've given us an idea what the characters are like and now looks like we are getting to the juicy bit keep up the good work!

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #7 on: 17. October 2022, 19:33:01 PM »
Keep up the good work @crowdedprincess

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Re: Story: I really like those bunny teeth
« Reply #8 on: 19. October 2022, 03:46:54 AM »
It's so cute so far!