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Story--Fine Print
« on: 20. April 2020, 19:32:27 PM »
Decided to write some stories for the quarantine.  More chapters coming soon.  Suggestions appreciated!


CHAPTER 1

It was official, I needed to see the dentist.  At 22, I hadn’t been in over a year and I was far overdue for a check-up.  I called Dr. Rose’s office (it was the closest) and decided to schedule an appointment for tomorrow afternoon.  After all, a little teeth cleaning couldn’t hurt, right?  Dr. Rose was actually new in town.  The old dentist that used to work at the old practice passed away and she moved in to fill the position.  From what I read online, the entire building got a sleek remodel, making it look really modern and fancy.  That night I slept well, excited to satisfy my conscience. 


The next morning, I slept in until about 11:30.  I ate a small breakfast and drove over to the dentist office.  As expected, the once gray structure now sparkled in the sunlight.  The whole facility was actually very inviting and I gleefully trotted inside.  The receptionist told me to sit down in a plush waiting room.  All around were velvet chairs and vibrant flowers.  It wasn’t long before a young lady beckoned me into an exam room.

“Hi, I’m Dr. Rose and I will be doing your dental cleaning today.  Lay there and I’ll take a look.”

I ease myself into the chair and stare up into the beautiful face of Dr. Rose.

“Ok, it looks like you have some cavities.  Some of these will require fillings.  We can knock those out today if you would like?”

I didn’t have anything else planned. “That sounds good!” I say.

She stares straight at me. “Perfect, we will need to use an anesthetic so will you please sign this waiver really quick?”

She hands me the waiver and I flip through some pages until I reach the signature lines.  I scribble in my name and hand it back to her.

“Okay, let's get started!” 

She has gorgeous eyes and a sparkling smile.  I’m almost mesmerized as everything goes black.  Here and there I catch glimpses of dental instruments and metal contraptions before fading out again.  Her face flashes by like a slideshow moving too quickly.  At some point, I see a blue light flash in front of my eyes.  Finally, I come to.  I can’t feel anything around my mouth but Dr. Rose assures me it is just the numbing agent they used.  She tells me to schedule a follow up appointment for the next day to check on everything and hands me a note for the receptionist.


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« Reply #1 on: 20. April 2020, 19:34:36 PM »
CHAPTER 2

When I arrive home I still can’t feel my mouth so I decide to wait it out and watch some Netflix.  After a few hours, feeling starts to return to my mouth.  I try to feel around with my tongue, but there’s something blocking it’s movement.  What the hell?  I decide it’s just residual effect from the numbing.  But soon after, I feel some kind of material encasing my upper and lower palates.  I am also unable to move my mouth from side to side and have to move my jaws in a certain way to close them.  Again, I decide to wait a little longer for my mouth to return to normal.  However, the feeling never subsides and saliva is building up in my mouth.  I decide to have a look.  I walk to the nearest mirror and am astonished by what is staring back at me.  First off, there are large metal brackets on all of my front teeth.  Starting at my canines, each tooth is fully encased in metal all the way to the molars.  But that's not the surprising part.  In my upper jaw, there is a mass of tie-dye plastic extending below my front teeth.  Same with the lower jaw.  In fact, my teeth don’t even touch when I try to fully close them!  There is a portion of plastic showing whenever my lips part!  Also, I can’t see it but there is some sort of device totally restricting my tongue’s movement.  I can’t even move it an inch!  In addition there are metal bars on either side of my mouth that move like pistons whenever I open or close my mouth.  I panic and try to remove all of these devices but have no luck.  What did that lady DO to me?  By now, saliva is everywhere and I can’t for the life of me seem to swallow.  A lot of sucking and slurping later, I have to use a paper towel to dry out my mouth.


For the rest of the day I try to get used to this torture device inside my mouth.  There is an especially unsettling clacking noise whenever I close my mouth due to plastic in my jaws coming together.  Come dinner time, I heat up some mac n cheese.  But when I try to take a bite, it just gets mashed into the plastic plate on my upper jaw.  Since my teeth don’t touch, I decide eating will be impossible.  Cleaning that piece of macaroni out was also a nightmare.  I skip brushing my teeth that night and decide to go to sleep early.  I end up sticking a paper towel in my mouth to deal with the never ending drool these contraptions seem to induce.

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« Reply #2 on: 20. April 2020, 23:37:16 PM »
CHAPTER 3

Cut to my drive to Dr. Rose’s office, I am running through my head all the ways I will demand release from these contraptions stuck in my mouth.  When I arrive, the receptionist directs me to the row of velvet chairs before Dr. Rose leads me back to her office.  The second the door closes, I unleash my fury: “I woh noh whu wu fuh e ey ouff fuh I vevah wu fafe e auff wau!”  Oh my god,  I CAN’T EVEN TALK?!

Dr. Rose interjects, “I see you are getting used to your appliances.  I had a patient right after you yesterday so I didn’t have time to go over this with you which is why I arranged this follow-up appointment.  How does everything feel?”

Again I try to say something but all that comes out are broken, unintelligible noises.

“Yes, it is difficult to talk at first.  I’m also sure you discovered eating can be tricky too.  But in time, everything will feel normal.  Would you like a run through of your treatment plan?”

I was still very confused about what she meant.  Treatment Plan?

She continued, “As many people don’t know, I am not only a dentist, but also a part time orthodontist!  I’m sure you’ve seen braces before, well, that’s what you have!  I also added on some appliances in order to fix various problems with your bite, tongue posture, etc…  When I examined your mouth yesterday, I noticed some problems that could be effectively fixed with orthodontics.  So, I decided to surprise you with a discount treatment!  That waiver you signed had all the details about these braces and everything.  Since you signed off on it, I decided to do it all in the same day.”

This still isn’t registering with me.  What kind of treatment is she talking about?  Then it hits me.  I should have read the fine print.  I think back to how I flipped through the waiver without even reading it.

Dr. Rose interrupts my thought process.  “So, after I filled your cavities, I then took molds of your teeth.  Luckily, I had all of the right sizes for your appliances on hand.  First, I installed your upper expander.  This consists of a large acrylic plate combined with an expansion screw.  I needed to make it as large as possible in order to expand your palate evenly.  Then, I put in your lower expander.  This also has an acrylic plate with expansion screw.  Next, I needed to correct your tongue thrust.  Normally, a conventional tongue crib is used.  However, I have been developing some new appliances in my lab and decided to use them here.  I call it a tongue cage.  Unlike the tongue crib where the appliance can be bypassed on the sides and underneath, the tongue cage fully surrounds the tongue.  This allows for the most efficient and compliant treatment possible.  By restricting movement of the tongue entirely, a tongue thrust is impossible.  This is placed in between depressions in your expanders so everything fits snugly.  Next, I put on typical braces to align your teeth correctly.  I used bands on your molars, premolars, and canines in order to anchor your expanders sufficiently though.  Finally, I needed to fix your overbite.  For this, I installed a Herbst appliance.  But, I had to add 2 additional arms on each side in order to stay functional during your long treatment time.”

Long treatment time?  How long would I have this excessive orthodontia for?

“I have also cemented everything in so it can’t be taken out.  This makes it easy to comply, just let the appliances do their job!  I will also be adding some more stuff today to improve some of your habits and make for an overall beautiful smile!”

I see her grab something off a nearby table.  She puts in a lip spreader and starts to fiddle around in my mouth.  She pulls out a blue light and shines it a few times.  When she removes the lip spreader I feel as if my lips are still being held at bay. 

“I have just installed a lip bumper.  This will keep your lips away from your teeth to fix your lip-chewing habit.  You can see what it looks like.”

I look in the mirror she hands me and see a translucent bar running under my upper and lower lips.  This effectively holds my lips permanently apart from each other so the braces and tie-dye acrylic are painfully obvious.

Dr. Rose goes on explaining her handiwork.  “Along with your modified appliances, you will also have a modified treatment time.  My main goal is to prevent a relapse so I will be lowering the tightness of your appliances but in turn instituting a longer treatment.  This way, your mouth will transform more slowly and naturally.  You will have the Herbst appliances and lip bumpers in for about 120 months.  After I remove those, The expanders, tongue cage, and braces will remain in place for another 60 months.  It will all be worth it in the end!  Any questions?”

All the metal and plastic in my mouth is starting to make sense now.  If I open my mouth wide enough I can just barely make out a little metal cage surrounding my tongue.  I can also see the little metal screws in my upper and lower palates she was talking about.  I try to calculate how long I have to wear these appliances.  180 months?  Isn’t that 15 years?!  I can’t deal with this for 15 YEARS!  I will not only be trying to make a living in braces.  But I will also be visiting my family for the next 15 years, IN BRACES!  I try to plead with Dr. Rose, “huh e wayey foo e fufe fwemeht fih?”  But my speech is still impossible to understand.

“Like I said,” continues Dr. Rose, “Talking and eating will be tricky for a short while.  But you will get used to your appliances.  Soon, you won’t even know they’re there!  I will schedule you an appointment in a month to see how you’re doing.  Until then, contact me if there are any problems.”

She hands me a copy of the waiver as well as an overview of my treatment plan and runs off into another room.

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« Reply #3 on: 21. April 2020, 04:18:46 AM »
Wow, that would be a dream treatment and experience except for the length of treatment!

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« Reply #4 on: 21. April 2020, 07:35:29 AM »
Great story, I love it!

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« Reply #5 on: 21. April 2020, 12:47:55 PM »
Great story8

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« Reply #6 on: 21. April 2020, 13:31:03 PM »
Nice Story! :) :)

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« Reply #7 on: 21. April 2020, 13:50:17 PM »
Awesome story, and good luck for the next 15 years!

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« Reply #8 on: 21. April 2020, 14:36:14 PM »
This is amazing!
Please don't let us wait a month until the next part.

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« Reply #9 on: 21. April 2020, 15:47:29 PM »
very good

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« Reply #10 on: 21. April 2020, 18:09:35 PM »
I think this is obvious, but just to clear any doubts, yes this is fiction.

CHAPTER 4

When I arrive home, I read over the waiver thoroughly this time.  Sure enough, it says that I am agreeing to an orthodontic treatment and will accept whatever is prescribed.  Apparently I’m paying $5000 for this.  Even lower and in finer print it says if I do not comply with the full treatment plan, I will have to pay an additional $5000.  So I suppose I’ll be stuck with the braces for the time being.  Maybe next visit I can cut out some sort of a deal.


I dry to drink some simple liquids for lunch.  Swallowing is nearly impossible but with some sucking and a whole lot of slurping, I manage to get some water down.  I once again skip food as I just don’t know how I’m supposed to eat.  As I fall asleep I dread going to work in the morning. 

I decide to call in sick because there is no way I’m going to work without being able to talk.  For the entire day, I practice talking in front of a mirror.  But no matter how hard I try, I just can’t seem to form comprehensible words.

Fast forward to tomorrow… I have decided to go into work as I can’t take sick days forever.  I try to hide my face as I walk into the office but a number of pedestrians as well as the receptionist notice my braces and tie-dye acrylic.   She gives me a questioning look but I shrug it off.  Only a few times throughout the day do people notice my appliances.  There are a couple stares and some confused faces but overall not too much embarrassment.    Then a coworker, Tom, walks up to me and ask if I want to go to a dinner party with him tonight.  How can I decline?  I nod a yes and that’s when he asks about my braces.  I just shrug and say: “bwatheth.”  He stares for a moment but then leaves to talk to someone else.

That night, I arrive at one of those fancy Brazilian style bistros where they bring around platters of meat.  I nervously walk inside and find a group of co-workers sitting around a table, chatting.  I take a seat and give a little wave, “Heyh.”  About half of them notice my braces.  Then, the waiter comes around taking drink orders.  When he gets to me, I simply point at an existing glass of water and he seems to understand.  Everyone at the table has noticed my braces by now but they stay silent for the sake of politeness.  However, when they bring the first plate of beef over I start to drool uncontrollably.  A small puddle of saliva is forming on the tablecloth and everybody is staring.  I try to suck it in but just end up slobbering even more.  I take a piece of steak and try to ignore the constant stares shooting in my direction.  Unfortunately, everybody is trying to watch me eat like it’s a movie!  I cut a small piece of meat and insert it into my mouth.  I bite down, the acrylic plates smashing it like a trash compactor.  Meat juice dribbles down my chin and into my lap.  I see people huddled together, whispering about me.  I attempt to chew some more.  The flattened beef is now to the tongue cage.  I furiously try slurping and sucking through the bars and down my throat much to the amusement of the gathering crowd.  But my attempts were in vain.  The meat just won’t go through.  I resort to eating crackers.  At least those can be crushed and the crumbs sucked through my tongue cage.  When the diners realize the show’s over, they begin eating their own food.  When they aren’t paying attention, I try eating the steak again.  This time, I cut it into minuscule pieces.  Luckily, they make it through my obstructed mouth and I’m able to swallow them.  I look up to see some of the diners staring again.  It’s really starting to tick me off.

I try to stand up for myself: “whithen huyth, thohp thaweg ah weh wihk ihw ihn a hoddam thoo!”

One, now two, and soon everybody breaks into laughter.  My face goes bright red and I run out of the restaurant, crying.

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« Reply #11 on: 22. April 2020, 00:44:12 AM »
This story could go on for 15 years and I'd love every second of it. Well done.
Pulchritudo ex machina

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« Reply #12 on: 22. April 2020, 01:31:57 AM »
Nice story so far! Keep it up, looking forward to further parts.

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« Reply #13 on: 22. April 2020, 05:32:04 AM »
Love this story. Well done. Keep it up!

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« Reply #14 on: 22. April 2020, 11:43:06 AM »
Such an extreme treatment! Love it.

I could imagine that to help him with eating he will get a feeding tube through the nose.
And to get rid of the saliva the ortho could install another unimaginable contraption that feeds another tube through the nose into the back of his mouth which sucks out all the saliva or puts it into the feeding tube into his stomach. Clearly, the apparatus will have to be worn somewhere on his body. Maybe on a neck collar/brace.

To help with communication he will have to learn sign language and to make apparent that he can't speek he will get huge colorful hearing aids to wear for the length of his treatment.

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« Reply #15 on: 22. April 2020, 15:34:23 PM »
Great!

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« Reply #16 on: 24. April 2020, 00:14:32 AM »
I'll be writing Chapter 5 sometime within the next week, so stay tuned!

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« Reply #17 on: 24. April 2020, 00:55:51 AM »
I am looking forward to reading it.

I would like your permission to add this story and any others that you may write to TheArchive. TheArchive is my personal collection of stories from the internet dating back to the start of the internet. I always try to get permission from the author so that there is no accusation that I stole it. I also ask the authors to send me any other stories that they may have or that they may write, even if they don't meet the guidelines for posting here.

I have been enjoying all the new stories that have been posted lately and look forward to reading more of them.

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« Reply #18 on: 24. April 2020, 02:52:33 AM »
Go ahead, you have permission for any of my stories.  Thats why I write them    :)

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« Reply #19 on: 24. April 2020, 07:53:18 AM »
Ich finde die Geschichte super spannend und bin mal gespannt, was alles noch so mit seinem Mund passieren wird - toll, weiter so

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« Reply #20 on: 25. April 2020, 09:13:03 AM »
CHAPTER 5

Over the next week, I search for a speech therapist online.  Since talking is my biggest weakness, I need to get that figured out.  After looking for a while at different therapists, I find the perfect one.  She has experience with orthodontic patients and has an adult-only facility.  I schedule an appointment for next Tuesday, my day off. 

It’s surprising how the simplest, most taken-for-granted actions are now impossible with my braces.  I can’t even go 15 minutes without needing a towel to dry my saliva-filled mouth.  Swallowing is still undoable.  And most annoying of all, any single food particle that gets stuck on my lips, teeth, braces, herbst appliances, or expanders has to be removed by hand.  This is because I can’t lick my lips or gather food particles with my tongue thanks to my tongue cage.  So, I pretty much spend 10% of my time at meals actually eating and the other 90% hand-cleaning gunk out of my braces.

The next days at work are absolute hell as coworkers from the diner incident give me snears and laugh behind my back.  One guy, Mathew, walks straight up to me and says, “I’ve seen braces, but what the hell do YOU have?”  I walk away with my head down because I know I’ll only embarrass myself more by trying to answer him.

Finally the day of speech therapy!  I can’t wait to get my life back on track.  I step into a brightly lit room where a receptionist tells me to wait while my therapist gets ready.  A few minutes later, a woman walks in.  “Hi, I’m Monica, your speech therapist.  What are you hoping to accomplish today?”
I try my best to say something, ANYthing, but as per usual, I sound like a gurgling mess.
She cuts in, “okay then…  we’ll get started right away on that.”
For the rest of the day, she coaches me through speech exercises and different sounds.  But with the tongue cage preventing any necessary tongue movements and the acrylic blocks filling my mouth with saliva, I make absolutely zero progress.  Monica’s reassuring voice tells me it will get better with practice, but I just sigh.  It’s useless.

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« Reply #21 on: 16. June 2020, 19:02:24 PM »
push -- please don't let this great story die

I really want to see how his life goes on and what's in store next, there is still some room in his mouth

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« Reply #22 on: 17. June 2020, 07:31:36 AM »
Will add more!

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« Reply #23 on: 17. June 2020, 19:15:41 PM »
I like the story. Im looking forward whats coming next!  :)

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« Reply #24 on: 18. June 2020, 07:54:05 AM »
I like this story a lot. I'm not sure if I missed it or not, but I like how the protagonist's gender is up for interpretation.

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« Reply #25 on: 19. June 2020, 03:12:06 AM »
You didn’t miss a thing!  I intended so the reader can be more imaginative in there interpretation of the story.

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« Reply #26 on: 20. June 2020, 20:01:53 PM »
Great sotry so far. Both the extensive(!) Treatment time as well as the payment penalty for not following the treatment plan make for an excellent story!

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« Reply #27 on: 24. June 2020, 15:20:01 PM »
What an extreme treatment! Definitely looking forward to seeing where this unique story goes!