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Offline danfan209

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Story: Elly & Alex
« on: 19. November 2020, 15:34:29 PM »
Story: Elly & Alex

First attempt at writing a story. English isn't my native language and interpunction is a weak point of mine.

Chapter 1: Elly

Elly was a shy 22-year-old girl who lived with her parents. She recently graduated from dental school and had ambitions to become an orthodontist. Both of Elly's parents had beautiful smiles but hers looked of, her own dentist said she didn’t need braces but Elly always doubted that due to her having narrow jaws and an overbite.

One day during summer holiday Elly walked downstairs and saw her parents sitting on the couch in the living room and took a seat right between her parents and handed them brochures of orthodontic collages she might like to go to. They took a look at all them and the name on last brochures her parents recognized as both had got treatment at that collage on recommendation of their dentists. 

Elly instantly made up her mind and told her parents she wanted to go that collage and went online to apply and a week later she got a letter of acceptance, and she would start on the 1st of august. 

Two weeks before starting college she shopped around for some supplies, she's needing a few A4 notebooks for class, a few new pencils and pens, a new bag while shopping she wondered what orthodontist collage and fellow her classmates would be like.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #1 on: 19. November 2020, 17:49:21 PM »
Good start. Looking forward to where this will go!

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #2 on: 19. November 2020, 20:44:00 PM »
. I know your struggle while writing, just like you English is not my native language. I encourage you to keep writing.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #3 on: 19. November 2020, 21:52:17 PM »
Chapter 2: The first day

Elly woke up on her first day of orthodontic college. She got dressed and went downstairs and quickly ate breakfast. After she was done, she went to the bathroom to brush her teeth and got ready to go to college. Her mother was going to drop her off.
 
They got in the car. About halfway there, her mother looked over to her and asked what was wrong. She could see Elly looked a bit troubled.
 
"Well, I don't know," Elly said. "I'm just a bit nervous, I guess."

"Don't worry sweetheart, you be fine."

"Thanks Mom." 30 minutes later they arrived at the college.
 
Elly gave her mom a kiss on the cheek and went towards the college reception.
 
"Name please?" said the receptionist.
 
"Elly Hall," said Elly.
 
"Your first class is in room 2.1C."

"Thank you." Elly went to go look for the room.
 
Elly looked around and saw she had to go upstairs.
 
Eventually Elly found the room and saw it was a small class of about 7 students.
 
She opened the door and a woman greeted her. 
 
"Hello, who might you be?"

"Hello, I'm Elly Hall."

"Oh, good, you're the last one in my class to arrive. Please take a seat."

Elly took a seat and the professor began with the usual welcome speech you would expect on every first day of class.
 
"Hello everyone, I'm professor Emilia Evans, but please call me Emily. I'm the teacher for your orthodontic related subjects. The other teachers probably will introduce themselves later in the day."

"I'm sure you all want to socialize with your fellow classmates but I'm afraid you have to do that during lunch break, as I want to start right away."

She gestured to the dental chair.
 
"I'm going to let each of you make an impression of the other classmate's teeth."
 
"Elly and Alex, you go first." She instructed how to make the alginate and how to use the tray and after that was done, everyone got to rinse to get rid of the remaining alginate.
 
"Now that everyone is done, we are going to make a model with the impressions that you all just took and I want you to do it in teams of 2." 
 
Elly picked Alex because he very was gentle with making impressions of her teeth and she tried to be gentle with his impressions as well, but she had to start again after she was startled by Alex's gag reflex, having to reapply the alginate in the tray.
 
Emily instructed how they should go about making the models.
 
After they were done with the models making, they had turned them in to Emily.
 
When Elly turned hers in, Emily looked at the model and raised an eyebrow of interest.
 
Elly didn’t notice it and left the classroom with her classmates for lunchbreak.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #4 on: 19. November 2020, 22:54:04 PM »
Chapter 3: The rest of the first day

After Elly walked out of the classroom, she saw Alex was waiting for her.
 
"Hi, I'm Alex."

"Hi, I'm Elly, nice to properly meet."

"Want to go to the canteen to get something to eat?" Alex asked.
 
"Sure, anything to get the taste of alginate out of my mouth."

Alex laughs at that comment, and says he also wants to get rid of the horrible taste.
 
They pick up lunch from the canteen and they go and sit with their classmates.
 
They introduce themselves as Julian, Ian, Jack, Lily, Abigail and Emma.
 
After Alex and Elly introduced themselves to them as well, Alex asked Elly where she was from.
 
Elly explained she was from a small town about 60 minutes away and that her mother dropped her off here this morning, then it was her turn to ask Alex where he was from.
 
Alex told Elly he was from the city the college was in. But he lived on the other side of the city a good 15 minutes away.
 
While Alex was talking, Elly kept staring at Alex's mouth and after Alex was done explaining where he was from, Elly asked him why he didn't get braces.
 
Alex blushed a bit because Elly was looking at his mouth. He explained that his parents couldn't really afford them and after he turned 18, he was responsible for his own healthcare and since then, he didn't think about getting braces.
 
After a while talking, Emma said they have to go to their next class.
 
The rest of the day wasn't that exciting, the other professors introduced themselves and told them what they did and that the subject of orthodontics was going to take up Monday and Tuesday, and the other subjects were going to be on Wednesday and Thursday and that Friday was going to be a home study day.
 
After that was all over, it was time to head home. Elly said goodbye to her classmates and saw that her mom was there waiting for her.
 
She got in the car and they went home.
 
After getting home, Elly went to the college login portal and she saw she had an email from Emily.
 
In the email was a schedule with times Emily wanted to see each of them the next day.
 
Elly didn’t think much of it and saw she was the first one to have a one-to-one conversation with Emily at 08:30.
 
After that, she had dinner and went to her room to go to bed. She was very tired and fell asleep almost instantly.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #5 on: 19. November 2020, 23:24:08 PM »
Let me be the first to say this is an interesting idea.  I'm sure that I won't be the first "like."  Looking forward to more.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #6 on: 20. November 2020, 00:20:27 AM »
Chapter 4 goes a bit more into the aspect of braces :P

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« Reply #7 on: 20. November 2020, 00:24:17 AM »
Well, I think you've set the stage beautifully.  Fresh ideas are hard to come by and I was instantly intrigued.

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« Reply #8 on: 20. November 2020, 01:03:08 AM »
Chapter 4: The Second day


Elly woke up at 7 the next morning. She quickly got dressed and hopped on her bike to the train station. After she found a seat in the train, she wondered what Emily wanted to talk about. Elly was so lost in thoughts that she almost missed her stop.
 
After she got off the train, she walked the last bit to the college. It was only a 5-minute walk after all. 
 
She walked up the stairs to the classroom and knocked on the door.
 
Emily signalled for her to come in.
 
"Please come with me to my office." Emily's office was attached to the classroom, the only thing dividing it was a glass door.
 
"Have a seat, Elly," Emily said.
 
"I wanted to talk to you yesterday, but you were already gone. Elly, I've looked at the model of your teeth and I worked out a treatment plan already."

"Treatment?" Elly asked.
 
"Yes. At this college, the students wear braces during the whole education. We introduced that a few years ago, most students that attend the orthodontic college need braces anyway."

Elly looked a bit shocked at first but felt a little excited as well. 
 
"My dentist said I never needed braces."

"Well, you do. Your teeth aren't really crooked, but your jaws are rather small and you have an overbite."

"So, what does that mean?" Elly asked.
 
"Well, we need to expand your jaws with expanders. To fix your overbite, I want to use a Herbst appliance and you will need braces to go along with all that."

Elly looked a bit shocked. She never thought she needed so much done.
 
"I want to start right now. Take a seat in the dental chair over there."

Elly did what she was asked.
 
Emily went to get herself an assistant. When she returned, Elly saw a young woman. She introduced herself as Eva.
 
"Eva here is in her second year of orthodontic college," Emily said.
 
While talking, Elly saw nothing but metal in Eva's mouth.
 
Elly asked if her mouth was going to have that much metal as well.
 
"Yes, we need as much control possible in your mouth."

Elly shivered a bit but let it all happen.
 
Emily put spacers between all her teeth.
 
"Now, Elly, you won't be able to eat anything sticky. I want to see you again tomorrow after you're done with classes."

"Okay," Elly said.
 
"You can go now. Can you send Alex in next, please?"

"Yeah, will do." Elly stepped out of Emily's office and saw Alex sitting in the classroom.
 
"Alex, Emily wants to speak to you next."

Alex saw a whole lot of blue between Elly’s teeth.
 
But Emily was waiting for him, so there was no time to ask.
 
Elly left to get some food in the canteen because she had skipped breakfast that morning.
 
She got herself a cheese sandwich and took a seat, but as soon she took a bite from it, the pain shot through her mouth. She threw out the sandwich and went to the bathroom to look in the mirror. She saw a bunch of blue spacers between her teeth.
 
After she examined her mouth, she exited the bathroom only to see Alex heading to the canteen. She ran towards him to ask how the conversation with Emily went. She had an idea of what shock he went through as well.
 
"Hey, Alex."

"Oh, hi Elly," he replied, covering his mouth.
 
"Alex, it's alright, let me see."

Alex dropped his hand to reveal a bunch of spacers as well.
 
"Emily said that I have to get full banded braces with 2 fixed face-bows to move my molars back."

"I also have to get full banded braces, but with expanders and a Herbst appliance."

"I guess we both will have a mouth full," Alex said.
 
"Want to get some yoghurt? Because you won't be able to eat a sandwich."

"Yep, sounds good." After they ate their yoghurt, they hung out in the canteen for a while before heading to class.
 
Emily welcomed everyone and started her class for that day.

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #9 on: 20. November 2020, 12:15:56 PM »
where could i sign to this college... dream would come true if i could have such a treatment

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« Reply #10 on: 20. November 2020, 17:39:11 PM »
@aktivator82 Seriously! I'd enjoy going to school there!

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« Reply #11 on: 20. November 2020, 18:15:49 PM »
@aktivator82 Seriously! I'd enjoy going to school there!


@carking... Yes, seriously!!! Full banded braces, expanders, herbst appliances and 2 fixed facebows awesome !!!!!

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« Reply #12 on: 20. November 2020, 21:42:37 PM »
This is so good!

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« Reply #13 on: 20. November 2020, 22:03:14 PM »
Good story so far seems a promising start  keep up the good work

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Re: Story: Elly & Alex
« Reply #14 on: 21. November 2020, 12:59:51 PM »
Your story is really starting to make progress. It's not that I don't like your story but I always like to see some mysteries. For my all details of their treatment plans feels a bit rushed. What else is going to happen now? Maybe I'm completely wrong and some unexpected turns are made during your story, I'm curious. Good luck continuing your story.