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Offline dominek000

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Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« on: 28. February 2021, 23:38:30 PM »
     Chapter 1

Maybe let's start with how it all started ...
My name is Cloe, I'm 19, I'm a college student. I have always dreamed of getting braces. Unfortunately, I come from a poor family, so my parents could never afford to buy a braces. Today, when I was browsing the internet, I came across a website where you can buy various types of braces, everything I always dreamed about was there. The prices were lower than the real harness, but it was still too expensive for me.

The next day, when I was at school, during a cigarette break, I hid in the bushes as usual. Of course, smoking was strictly prohibited at school. Suddenly, I noticed my teacher coming from across the street. I quickly hid deep into the bushes. The teacher just looked my way and then left for school. I felt a nudge with my right foot. I turned to see a pink box. Small size, someone must have thrown it there recently as it didn't look damaged. I wondered what was inside and if I should open it. Curiosity prevailed! When I opened the box, I couldn't believe what I saw. It was like a dream come true, as if an angel threw it from heaven for me. Just yesterday I dreamed of how great it would be to have braces, and now I open the box, and in it what ?! Ladies and gentlemen, yes! There was a set of braces in the box. Clip-on, fixed braces with a herbst appliance and a double expander. There was also a headgear inside. I quickly took the box, put it in my backpack, and ran back to class. Throughout the rest of the lessons I was wondering why the hell someone threw it out, who did they belong to, would they fit me? I couldn't wait to get home and take a closer look at it. I couldn't believe how lucky I was.

 The end of chapter 1...

Offline acornjohn2001

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #1 on: 01. March 2021, 13:27:51 PM »
Great start!

Offline carking

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #2 on: 01. March 2021, 17:09:28 PM »
Nice job!

Offline retained

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #3 on: 02. March 2021, 01:37:21 AM »
Interested!!

Offline jonjon

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #4 on: 02. March 2021, 01:41:39 AM »
Good start can't wait to read more

Offline Braceface2015

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #5 on: 02. March 2021, 12:03:50 PM »
I have added the start of the story to TheArchive. It looks like a promising start to what may be a good story.

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #6 on: 04. March 2021, 13:25:41 PM »
This looks like a really promising start! I can't wait for more!

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #7 on: 10. March 2021, 15:19:20 PM »
Great start! I really hope you will continue!

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #8 on: 14. March 2021, 09:42:36 AM »
I would LOVE to see a chapter 2 if you're able! I'm liking this concept!  ;D

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #9 on: 14. March 2021, 10:02:48 AM »
A really interesting idea! Looking forward to seeing more.

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Re: Story: Cloe's Amazing Find!
« Reply #10 on: 14. March 2021, 18:43:17 PM »
Next chapter please !