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Offline Bryce

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Sooner than later
« on: 06. April 2021, 00:14:08 AM »
Ch. 1

Sean slowly opened his eyes.  The sun was starting to light the bedroom.  Erica nudged him "get up lazy guy". A smile formed on his face while Erica leaned in and gave him a little kiss.  He watched while she rolled out of bed to start her day. 

He walks in behind her in the bathroom as shes brushing her teeth.  Sean begins to go the same.  Groggily looking in the mirror studying his teeth.

Erica trying to speak while still brushing" you know your insurance will help pay for it." Sean responded with silence.  Erica rinses and turns to him.  "Really though, I think you should do it.  You'll still be my man, just my tin grin man haha". This made him smile at her "see just like that, but shiny!  It'll be fun, I'll be here to help the whole time.".

Sean: you're not going to let me slide by this one huh? Haha

Erica: nope!...I might have made a phone call yesterday....

S: oh yeah huh? To whom might this call be to?

E: ... Maybe... An orthodontist.  And you might have an appointment tomorrow for a consult... (Showing a guilty smile)

S: tomorrow?!? I don't know about this, we should talk more and.. (he gets cut off as she raised a finger to his lips to shush him followed by a gentle kiss.  He looks into her eyes.  Wondering if she knew that there's wasn't anything he wouldn't do to make her happy.)

E: what's up superman? big tough Sean can't be scared of something that kids can do is he? Hmm

S: I've told you how intense my treatment was when I was younger? Felt like a freak! 

E: I remember you telling me about it.  If you weren't such a rebel and followed your treatment we wouldn't be having this talk now! But ortho has come along way since then, I'm sure it'll be nothing like that. And even if you got your facemask again, you'd be MY freak, and that doesn't bother me at all"

Sean smiled and rolled his eyes as she walked out the room to get ready. Memories rush into his head of his braces, expander, elastics, facemask... Each time getting out of the chair tring to deal with whatever new things the orthodontist decided to do to him that time...   Getting his facemask fitted is so fresh in his mind like it happened ten minutes ago instead of 20 years ago.

 Had ortho really changed? Can he get the clear aligner trays?  His teeth were in great condition, just not the right alignment.  The top canines protruded due to some crowding and his class iii bite made his jaw look thicker than a normal guys.  His enjoyment of fitness and his oversized bottom jaw got him the nickname "superman" and it stuck. He hated it when others called him it I'm a half mocking way but loved it when Erica said it endearment.


Erica slept well but Sean didn't sleep at all that night. Trying to figure out what would happen.  He couldn't be a 33 yeah old guy walking around sporting braces and whatever appliances.  Seeing Erica dream, could it be better this time with her help?

The next morning went by to fast and before he was ready it was appointment time.  Erica said she was going to meet him in the waiting room but Sean got there first.  The clocks hand move as Sean waited. Still no Erica. 

"Sean?"  A blonde gal in her early 40s and white scrubs looks around the waiting room.  did Erica forget? Sean looks around one last time then decided to acknowledge the lady named Cathy.

She makes small talk with him as she leads him to the orthodontist chair.  He notices a thin piece of metal running across her teeth.  Hawley retainers.  Cathy's polite but seemed a little bossy. 

C: so the note says you're looking at getting orthodontics to fix your underbite and crowding.  Our orthodontist specializes in complex adult treatment like yourself so you came to the right place. 

S: well I just got a consult to make my better half happy. Then I'll decide. Haha

C: whatever you need to tell yourself.  You can have a seat and open wide. (She inserts cheek retractors and began laying out tools on the tray.

Another female assistant walked up and handed Cathy some more tools and a teeth mold with an metal appliance attached to the upper and lower jaws.  Sean unable to talk just closed his eyes mad that Erica wasn't there.  Taking a deep breath a scent catches his attention.  Erica's perfume! Eyes jumping open and looking at the other assistant.  Looking into erica's eyes just above her mask.  She started to giggle watching him put the puzzle pieces together. 

He wanted to say something but couldn't due to the retractor.  He knew she was sneaky but this was impressive even for her.  Just at that moment the orthodontist walked up beside Sean. 

"Hello Sean, I'm Nicole your orthodontist.  I've come to know Erica well but glad to finally meet you.  She said you were hesitant for treatment but finally decided to have it done. Before I start I need you to nod yes or no please."

Sean's eyes squint at Erica in slight disapproval. He's going to find a way to get her back for this.  But Erica tilted her head and lays her hand over his. Sean thought to himself for a second.  Looking into erica's eyes he moved his head up and down in approval.

Cathy: great! Let's begin then shall we?





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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #1 on: 06. April 2021, 02:12:35 AM »
Looks like a cute start!

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #2 on: 06. April 2021, 03:06:34 AM »
Thank you! First try writing a story so we'll see how it turns out

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #3 on: 06. April 2021, 04:44:03 AM »
That's a very solid start. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this story. It's always nice to see more people writing stories. If you don't mind, I would like to add your story to TheArchive.

I'm going to make the same suggestion that I make to all writers. Use a good spell checker when you are writing. It will help you improve your writing as you are doing it. I like Grammarly and it works with Microsoft Word and Google Docs.

I also suggest that you read the rules for posting stories so that you don't get into trouble. I may not agree with some of the rules, but those are the rules that they have here. https://www.bracesforum.net/general/forum-rules/msg34239/#msg34239

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #4 on: 06. April 2021, 05:04:28 AM »
Thank, yeah I have no problem with you adding it.  I wrote it from my phone so hope it's mostly grammatically correct.  I'll try to keep it between the guidelines also.

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #5 on: 06. April 2021, 05:37:58 AM »
What an epic start! I can't wait to read more

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #6 on: 06. April 2021, 09:20:24 AM »
I found very little that could be changed. Your spelling is very good and the structure of your sentences is fine. Keep going and you will find that it gets easier to write as you get more comfortable doing it. Write the story that you want to read, not what you think other people want. It is impossible to write a story that everybody will like.

Thank you for allowing me to add it to my collection and I hope to have many more stories from you in the future.

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #7 on: 06. April 2021, 17:35:22 PM »
Great start! Looking forward to more!

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #8 on: 07. April 2021, 01:05:28 AM »
Appreciate all the positive feedback. Motivated to start writing chapter 2

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #9 on: 07. April 2021, 02:21:30 AM »
I know that I am looking forward to it. It's so nice to have some fresh stories to read.

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #10 on: 07. April 2021, 06:02:14 AM »
The pacing is very refreshing and well done! I love the sense of agency from Erica too. I'm very excited to see more!  ;D

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #11 on: 07. April 2021, 10:33:19 AM »
Hehehe, what's good for the goose, is good for the gander..  >:D

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #12 on: 22. April 2021, 18:20:45 PM »
Ch 2

Sean layed there trying to wrap his mind around what he got himself into.  Erica holding his hand with enjoyment.  He loved how she was always happy.  Everything was an adventure for her, and it helped him loosen up and have fun also. 

Cathy started to prep his teeth while Nicole masked up and put her gloves on.  She grabbed the teeth molds and pulled an appliance off the upper teeth mold... Sean recognized it right away.  Expander with clear acrylic over the molars.  Very similar to the one he had before.

Nicole: now Sean I'm guessing you already know what this is?

Sean rolls his eyes and nods in agreement

N: figured so haha, you're palates are still narrow so we need to fix that before we align your teeth. 

The chair reclines even more as Nicole rolls her chair beside sean's head.  Nicole starts to feel around in his mouth checking on Cathys wor prep work.  Cathy makes a comment about her not needing to check, she's done this a million times.  Nicole gives her a side look.  Can see they've worked together for way to long. 

N: you know, with Erica here, she can help me. All the hard work is done. You want to start the next patient Cathy?

C: gladly!  I might be able to get off work early today and have some wine! Haha he's all yours Erica.

E: really?! I always thought dental work was very interesting but your sure Nicole?  (Erica lights up with excitement)

N: I'm sure, Sean will be easier with your help anyways haha

Sean laughs a little as Erica pretends to take the new task very seriously.  Nicole inserts the expander for fit while Erica watches closely over her shoulder.  The expander clicks in place perfectly.  Nicole tries it two more times to make sure.

N: so we have an option,. I can leave this removable but you will have to wear it about every minute of the day anyways for it to work.  Could take it out once in a awhile for pictures, or a meeting etc.  Or I can fix it in place.

Before Sean can do anything Erica jumps in. "We should fix it in place, I love you Sean but if it's annoying you, you're going to take it out and never put it back in haha"

Nicole looks at Sean for his reaction.  Sean let's out a sigh in agreement with Erica.  Erica knew him better than he knew himself.  Nicole applied the adhesive and clicked the expander in place for the last time.  Sean could tell Erica was smiling even though he could only see her eyes.

N: okay, that wasn't to bad. See? Halfway done today.

Sean eyes got a little bigger, halfway? Nicole grabbed the lower teeth mold and removed another appliance. Sea Erica noticed Seans reaction and held his hand to comfort him.

N: Sean your bottom palate isn't where I want it so we're going to expand it just a little bit.  We have the same option with this one but whats the point to be able to remove just one?

Sean agreed with another annoyed huff.  He felt the bottom expander lock into place.  He was impressed with Ericas sneakiness to set all of this up.  A part of him was glad she did, he was never going to do it without her.  She made him better in a million different ways, even when he was reluctant.

Nicole removed the cheek retractor.  Sean runs his tongue over his new appliances... The smooth plastic over his molars and the sharp metal where the key goes.  Hes realizing his tongue has no room.  Erica watching him closely.

N: okay now for the homework part, Sean open wide, I'm going to show how the key works. 

She inserts the key into the top expander, but doesn't turn it. Pulls the key out and hands the key to Erica. 

N: okay you try Erica

E: really?! Okay I'll try.

She inserts the key, Nicole tells her to turn it.  She does as Sean face winces slightly.

E: that is so cool!  What an amazing device! This is more interesting than I expected!  Do I do the same to the bottom?

Nicole smiled and nodded.  Sean tries to move his tongue out of the way so Erica can turn the key.  Another wince shows on sean's face.

N: okay Erica, your the key master, and Sean you're the gate keeper.  Haha sorry I love to make that movie reference.  But Erica you'll need to turn the top expander once a day and the bottom once every other day.  Now Sean, you better let Erica do her job otherwise I'll have Cathy do it and she's not as friendly haha.

Sean smiles and looks at Erica. 

E: there's my superman!  (She places a hand on each side of his face and leans in for a kiss)
Well that's new haha, but new is good. New is fun. I'll make sure this adventure is fun!

Nicole goes over the do and donts then let's the two of them go until the next appointment. 

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #13 on: 23. April 2021, 17:30:13 PM »
Nice job!

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Re: Sooner than later
« Reply #14 on: 25. April 2021, 20:23:12 PM »
Let's see is superman is brave enough ;)