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New story Zara,s braces
« on: 26. September 2023, 22:17:36 PM »
Zara had found herself by a chance in East Germany she fell asleep on a tram in Berlin on her way home from a nite out  her stop still in the west was near the border unfortunatley she fell asleep and stayed on the tram. The border guard ignored her being rather annoyed at being on the niteshift so Zara found herself stranded in the east the next tram or train back to the west she was beggining to wonder where she was going to sleep when she saw a lite on in an apartment building. Taking her courage she rang the doorbell a few minutes later a women about Zaras age answered as she greeted Zara she smiled showing Zara a mouthfuls of metal braces zara was somewhat surprised she thought that that type of brace was something from when her mother was young. The girl introduced herself as Lotte please come in she  said to Zara my mother is just thru here.

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« Reply #1 on: 27. September 2023, 06:34:38 AM »
Zara's Braces

By Kelly-Marie



Part 1

Zara had found herself, by chance, in East Germany. She fell asleep on a tram in Berlin on her way home from a night out. Her stop, still in the west, was near the border. Unfortunately, she fell asleep and stayed on the tram. The border guard ignored her, being rather annoyed at being on the night shift, so Zara found herself stranded in the east, waiting for the next tram or train back to the west.

She was beginning to wonder where she was going to sleep when she saw a light on in an apartment building. Taking her courage, she rang the doorbell. A few minutes later, a woman about Zara's age answered. As she greeted Zara, she smiled, showing Zara a mouthful of metal braces. Zara was somewhat surprised. She thought that that type of braces was something from when her mother was young.

The girl introduced herself as Lotte. "Please come in," she said to Zara. "My mother is just through here."

Part 2

Zara followed Lotte into another room to meet her mother.

Lotte asked Zara her name, then said, “Mum, this is Zara.”

“Hi Zara, what are you doing out this late?”

"It's like this," Zara said. "I was on a tram going home from a night out clubbing. My apartment is near the border, and I guess I must have fallen asleep. The next thing I know is I'm at the tram depot with no way to get home until tomorrow."

Lottie's mother said, "Well, really I should report you to the authorities, but I think this will just cause us both trouble."

"Don't worry, as soon as I can, I'll get a tram home. Tell me, do you have a phone I can call my mum on?"

“Yes, it's through here in my surgery.”

"Surgery?" asked Zara in surprise.

“Yes,” said the mother, “you wouldn't know, but I'm an orthodontist, so I'm allowed a phone for business.”

Zara glanced at Lotte. She now had an idea of why she had such obvious and complicated braces. Zara followed the mother into her rather old-fashioned-looking office. She asked, "What's your name?"

“I'm Karen,” the woman said.

Zara smiled. She had a distant cousin in America called Karen. Zara dialled her home number. Fortunately, her mum answered. Zara explained what had happened and where she was. Her mum said, "Okay honey, I'll see you tomorrow."

Part 3

After her phone call, Zara suddenly felt rather lost. She and her mum were rarely apart and it had been at least a couple of years since Zara had been away anywhere.

"You okay, hunny," Karen asked, putting an arm around Zara to comfort her.

"Yes, I'm fine thank you," Zara said.

After a few minutes of general chatter between Zara, Karen and Lotte, Karen said, "Zara, have you ever had braces?"

Zara said, "Yes, when I was a teenager. I was supposed to get them, but we moved from Cologne to Berlin, so it got forgotten about. Why do you ask?"

"I notice that you have an underbite and that you also have a tongue thrust habit."

Zara was a bit stunned. She didn't know how to react.

"Oh mum," Lotte said, "Zara's not a patient. She's going back to West Berlin tomorrow."

Karen chuckled. "Yes, your right, but I just noticed is all."

Zara said, "I suppose it wouldn't hurt. I do get jaw pain from time to time."

"Sit in the chair, make yourself comfortable."

Zara settled herself in the chair as Karen started to examine Zara's teeth.

Part 4

Karen gave Zara's teeth a thorough examination. Eventually she said, "Okay Zara, I'm finished with examining your teeth and jaws. Why don't you rinse and freshen your mouth, then we can talk."

Zara rinsed with the minty mouthwash. When she was done, she said, "What do you think, Karen? How's it all looking?"

"I think," Karen began, "that you could do with some extensive treatment. I'd like to start you with full metal bands, and in a month or so, headgear. You would need to wear it 14 hours per day for at least 1 year, maybe a year and a half, depending on how it goes."

Zara was in shock. "Is my mouth really that bad?"

Karen said, "I'm sorry sweety, unfortunately it is."

Zara was stunned for a moment, then she remembered she was heading home to West Berlin tomorrow. She thought, "I'm sure an ortho there will have a less invasive, less obvious treatment."

"Karen," she said, "can you write up what you think and what you found? I'll give your notes to an orthodontist in the West. Also, when I get back, I'll get my mum to send you a money order or something to pay for your hard work."

"I can help you find an ortho. Here is a business card for a friend of mine who lives in West Berlin, she will be glad to help you."

"Thank you," said Zara. "That's a great help."

Part 5

Zara thanked Karen again and then said she was going to get some sleep. It was late and Zara wanted to be up early, ready to head home. She was given a blanket and pillow and she soon was comfortable on the sofa, where she drifted off to sleep.

The next morning, she woke up. It was a bright sunny day. Lotte came into the lounge where Zara was just waking up. "Morning Zara, how did you sleep."

"Very nicely thank you. I was warm and comfortable."

They had some breakfast. Soon Zara and Lotte were headed for the tram stop so Zara could return home. When they got there, she realised there was about a twenty-minute wait for the tram. She was a little worried, as there seemed to be a lot of police about.

Lotte told her, "Just remain calm, this early most of them are not on duty yet, so unless you stand out in a crowd, they won't really notice you." Zara did her best to remain calm. Soon the twenty minutes was up and the tram arrived. Lotte and Zara said their goodbyes and soon Zara was heading home. She felt herself relax when they finally crossed the border.

Soon she was getting off at her stop. Her mum was there to greet her. Zara told her mum what had happened. She kept the bit about Karen's assessment of her teeth to herself for a while. This was something to bring up when everything was calmer.

Part 6

Several weeks have gone by since Zara found herself stranded in East Berlin. Since that evening, she had been careful to not drink so much at the clubs she went to and thankfully had not fallen asleep on the tram home.

As time passed, Zara forgot about the orthodontic assessment Karen had given her. However, one evening she returned from work. Her mother was a little off-hand with her. Zara couldn't work out why, what could she possibly have done, she wondered. Finally her mother said, "Zara, when were you going to tell me about this?" She held up a crumpled piece of paper.

Zara recognised it as the notes Karen gave her regarding her bite. "Oh I, er, had forgotten about that," said Zara.

"Listen, Zara," her mum said, "if you need treatment, we should get it sorted. I know you get jaw pain sometimes. I think you need to see to it before you get much older. I've already made you an appointment with an ortho not far from here so you can get there easily."

"Okay mum, will you come with me for the first time at least?"

"Of course darling, that's no problem. Your appointment is tomorrow at half past 5."

Zara couldn't take it all in. Suddenly she was going to an appointment where she might end up with braces.

The next evening, Zara and her mum went to the ortho office. Zara was pleased to see it was a modern-looking place. In fact, it smelled of new paint, as well as the usual medical smell these places always have. Zara's mum went to the receptionist and said, "My daughter Zara has an appointment at half past five."

"Ah yes, the young lady who had a referral from another ortho."

"Yes, that's right," said her mum.

The receptionist told them to take a seat and fill out some paperwork.

After 10 minutes, a nurse came out. "Zara Shmidt, please."

Zara looked up. She was surprised, the receptionist had headgear on, and when she smiled, it looked as though her mouth was filled with plastic and metal. Zara stood up to follow her, hoping she wouldn't have that much metal and certainly not headgear.

Part 7

Soon it was Zara's turn. The ortho greeted her warmly. "Now don't worry, Zara," he said. "As you're a friend of Karen's, I'll be extra gentle, okay?"

Zara felt comforted by this. Soon they were joined by a nurse, who also had brightly colored powerchains on, as well as pink headgear. Zara gasped when she saw it. The ortho said, "You like Jane's braces? They certainly stand out, don't they?" Jane blushed and the ortho said, "Right, let's get started."

He examined Zara's teeth, mumbling things to the nurse who was writing lots of notes, and Zara thought she was drawing something on a big pad. After what seemed like a lifetime, he said, "Okay, Zara, I've examined you and can tell you you need full bands, and I think you need a facemask. I think you'll be in braces for 3 years, although towards the end it will just be straightforward bands."

Zara was in shock. She didn't know what to say, or what to think. The ortho had gone to explain the treatment plan to Zara's mother. Both women were in shock, neither expected Zara to need such work done.

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Re: New story Zara,s braces
« Reply #2 on: 27. September 2023, 06:36:09 AM »
I always enjoy your stories. It's nice to see you writing another one for us.

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« Reply #3 on: 28. September 2023, 17:43:18 PM »
Looking forward to reading more!

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« Reply #4 on: 29. September 2023, 02:27:42 AM »
Zara followed Lotte into another room to meet her mother. Lotte asked zara her name then said mum this is Lotte, hi lotte what are you doing out this late? It's like this Lotte said I was on a tram going home from a nite out clubbing my apartment is near the border and I guess I must of fallen asleep next thing I know is  I'm at the tram depot with no way to get home until tommorow. Lotties mother said well really I should report you to the authorities but I think this will just cause us both trouble. Don't worry as soon as I can il get a team home  tell me do you have a fone I can call my mum on? Yes it's through here in my surgery. Surgery asked zara in surprise, yes said the mother you wouldn't know but I'm an orthodontist so I'm allowed a fone for business zara glanced at Lotte she now had an idea why she had such obvious and complicated braces. Zara followed the mother into her rather old fashioned looking office she asked whats your name? I'm Karen the woman said zara smiled she had a distant cousin in America called Karen. Zara dialled the code her home number fortunately her mum answered zara explained what had happened and  where she was her mum said OK honey il see you tomorow.

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« Reply #5 on: 29. September 2023, 09:55:08 AM »
Part 2

Zara followed Lotte into another room to meet her mother.

Lotte asked Zara her name, then said, “Mum, this is Zara.”

“Hi Zara, what are you doing out this late?”

"It's like this," Zara said. "I was on a tram going home from a night out clubbing. My apartment is near the border, and I guess I must have fallen asleep. The next thing I know is I'm at the tram depot with no way to get home until tomorrow."

Lottie's mother said, "Well, really I should report you to the authorities, but I think this will just cause us both trouble."

"Don't worry, as soon as I can, I'll get a tram home. Tell me, do you have a phone I can call my mum on?"

“Yes, it's through here in my surgery.”

"Surgery?" asked Zara in surprise.

“Yes,” said the mother, “you wouldn't know, but I'm an orthodontist, so I'm allowed a phone for business.”

Zara glanced at Lotte. She now had an idea of why she had such obvious and complicated braces. Zara followed the mother into her rather old-fashioned-looking office. She asked, "What's your name?"

“I'm Karen,” the woman said.

Zara smiled. She had a distant cousin in America called Karen. Zara dialled her home number. Fortunately, her mum answered. Zara explained what had happened and where she was. Her mum said, "Okay honey, I'll see you tomorrow."

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« Reply #6 on: 01. October 2023, 22:32:27 PM »
After her fonecall Zara suddenly felt rather lost she and her mum were rarely apart  and it had been at least a couple of years since Zara had been away anywhere. You OK hunny Karen asked putting an arm around Zara to comfort her, yes I'm fine thankyou zara said. After a few minutes of generall chatter between zara Karen and Lotte Karen said zara have you ever had braces? Zara said yes when I was a teenager I was supposed to get them but we moved from cologne  to Berlin so it got forgotten about  why do you ask? I notice that you have an underbite and that you also have a tongue thrust habit. Zara was a bit stunned she didn't know how to react. Oh mum Lotte said zaras not a patient she's going back to west Berlin  tomorrow.  Karen chuckled yes your right but I just noticed is all. Zara said I suppose it wouldn't  hurt I do get jaw pain from time to time. Sit in the chair make yourself comfortable zara settled herself in the chair as Karen started to examine zaras teeth

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« Reply #7 on: 02. October 2023, 14:13:08 PM »
Part 3

After her phone call, Zara suddenly felt rather lost. She and her mum were rarely apart and it had been at least a couple of years since Zara had been away anywhere.

"You okay, hunny," Karen asked, putting an arm around Zara to comfort her.

"Yes, I'm fine thank you," Zara said.

After a few minutes of general chatter between Zara, Karen and Lotte, Karen said, "Zara, have you ever had braces?"

Zara said, "Yes, when I was a teenager. I was supposed to get them, but we moved from Cologne to Berlin, so it got forgotten about. Why do you ask?"

"I notice that you have an underbite and that you also have a tongue thrust habit."

Zara was a bit stunned. She didn't know how to react.

"Oh mum," Lotte said, "Zara's not a patient. She's going back to West Berlin tomorrow."

Karen chuckled. "Yes, your right, but I just noticed is all."

Zara said, "I suppose it wouldn't hurt. I do get jaw pain from time to time."

"Sit in the chair, make yourself comfortable."

Zara settled herself in the chair as Karen started to examine Zara's teeth.

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« Reply #8 on: 18. October 2023, 01:12:07 AM »
Karen gave Zaras teeth a thorough examination  eventually she said ok zara I'm finished with  examining your teeth and jaws why don't you rinse and freshen your mouth then we can talk. Zara rinsed with the minty mouth wash when she was done she said what you think Karen how's it all looking? I think Karen began that you could do with some  extensive treatment ide like to start you with full metal bands and in a month or so headgear you would need to wear it 14 hours per day for at least 1 year maybe a year and a half depending how it goes. Zara was in shock is my mouth really that bad? Karen said I'm sorry sweety unfortunatley it is. Zara was stunned for a moment then she remembered she was heading home to West Berlin tomorow she thought I'm sure an ortho there will have a less invasive less obvious treatment. Karen she said can you write up what you think and what you found il give your notes to an orthodontist in the west also when I get back il get my mum to send you a money order or something to pay for your hard work. I can help you find an ortho here is a business card for a friend of mine who lives in West Berlin she will be glad to help you. Thankyou said zara  that's a great help.

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« Reply #9 on: 18. October 2023, 06:12:11 AM »
Part 4

Karen gave Zara's teeth a thorough examination. Eventually she said, "Okay Zara, I'm finished with examining your teeth and jaws. Why don't you rinse and freshen your mouth, then we can talk."

Zara rinsed with the minty mouthwash. When she was done, she said, "What do you think, Karen? How's it all looking?"

"I think," Karen began, "that you could do with some extensive treatment. I'd like to start you with full metal bands, and in a month or so, headgear. You would need to wear it 14 hours per day for at least 1 year, maybe a year and a half, depending on how it goes."

Zara was in shock. "Is my mouth really that bad?"

Karen said, "I'm sorry sweety, unfortunately it is."

Zara was stunned for a moment, then she remembered she was heading home to West Berlin tomorrow. She thought, "I'm sure an ortho there will have a less invasive, less obvious treatment."

"Karen," she said, "can you write up what you think and what you found? I'll give your notes to an orthodontist in the West. Also, when I get back, I'll get my mum to send you a money order or something to pay for your hard work."

"I can help you find an ortho. Here is a business card for a friend of mine who lives in West Berlin, she will be glad to help you."

"Thank you," said Zara. "That's a great help."

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« Reply #10 on: 19. October 2023, 17:31:19 PM »
Looking forward to seeing where this goes!

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« Reply #11 on: 21. October 2023, 04:10:10 AM »
I don't know myself yet im still experimenting with different ideas

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« Reply #12 on: 02. November 2023, 16:44:19 PM »
Zara thanked Karen again then said she was going to get some sleep it was late and zara wanted to be up early ready to head home. She was given a blanket and pillow and she soon was comfortable on the sofa she drifted off to sleep the next morning she woke up it was a bright sunny day Lotte came into the lounge where zara was just waking up Morning zara how did you sleep very nicely thankyou I was warm and comfortable. They had some breakfast soon Zara and Lotte were headed for the tram stop so zara could return home. When they got there she realised there was about a twenty minute wait for the tram, she was a little worried as there seemed to be a lot of police about  Lotte told her just remain calm this early most of them are not on duty yet so unless you stand out in a crowd they won't really notice you. Zara did her best to remain calm, soon the twenty minutes was up the tram arrived Lotte and Zara said there goodbyes  and soon zara was heading home. She felt herself relax when they finally crossed the border. Soon she was getting off at her stop her mum was there to greet her, zara told her mum what had happened, she kept the bit about karens assessment of her teeth to herself for a while, this was something to bring up when everything was calmer

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« Reply #13 on: 03. November 2023, 02:34:35 AM »
Part 5

Zara thanked Karen again and then said she was going to get some sleep. It was late and Zara wanted to be up early, ready to head home. She was given a blanket and pillow and she soon was comfortable on the sofa, where she drifted off to sleep.

The next morning, she woke up. It was a bright sunny day. Lotte came into the lounge where Zara was just waking up. "Morning Zara, how did you sleep."

"Very nicely thank you. I was warm and comfortable."

They had some breakfast. Soon Zara and Lotte were headed for the tram stop so Zara could return home. When they got there, she realised there was about a twenty-minute wait for the tram. She was a little worried, as there seemed to be a lot of police about.

Lotte told her, "Just remain calm, this early most of them are not on duty yet, so unless you stand out in a crowd, they won't really notice you." Zara did her best to remain calm. Soon the twenty minutes was up and the tram arrived. Lotte and Zara said their goodbyes and soon Zara was heading home. She felt herself relax when they finally crossed the border.

Soon she was getting off at her stop. Her mum was there to greet her. Zara told her mum what had happened. She kept the bit about Karen's assessment of her teeth to herself for a while. This was something to bring up when everything was calmer.

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« Reply #14 on: 07. December 2023, 02:43:08 AM »
Well would you beleive it I wrote a whole new chapter then the Internet crashed and I lost it so il try to rewrite it later  it nearly 1 am here so I'm not doing it again now

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« Reply #15 on: 07. December 2023, 03:55:46 AM »
Use Google Docs, Grammarly, OpenOffice or another program so you have a copy of what you wrote no matter what happens. They all store a copy of what you are working on so it is easy to recover if something happens.

I prefer Google Docs because I can switch between my tablet and one of my computers without having to reload anything.

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« Reply #16 on: 13. December 2023, 21:34:30 PM »
I found out what caused my Internet to go wrong it was my fault the plug for my routrs mains supply is in a rather dodgy old socket and  even just touching it caused the Internet box to go off. Now it's sorted kind of the socket is still loose but at least now I know about it.

On a more positive note il post a new chapter very soon

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« Reply #17 on: 18. December 2023, 01:45:32 AM »
Several weeks have gone by since Zara found herself stranded in East Berlin since that evening she had been carefull to not drink so much at the clubs she went to and thankfully had not fallen asleep on the tram home.
As time passed Zara forgot about the orthodontic assessment Karen had given her however one evening she returned from work  her mother was a little off hand with her. Zara couldn't work out why what could she possibly have done she wondered. Finally her mother said Zara when were you going to tell me about this? She held up crumpled piece of paper, Zara recognised it as the notes Karen gave her regarding her bite. Oh I er had forgotten about that said Zara. Listen Zara her mum said if you need treatment we should get it sorted, I know you get jaw pain sometimes I think you need to see to it before you get much older I've already made you an appointment with an ortho not far from here so you can get there easily. OK mum will you come with me the first time at least? Of course darling that no problem your appointment is tomorow at half past 5. Zara couldn't take it all in suddenly she was going to an appointment where she mite end up with braces.

The next evening Zara and her mum went to the ortho office Zara was pleased to see it was a modern looking place in fact it smelled of new paint as well as the usuall medical smell these places always have. Zaras mum went to the receptionist and said my daughter Zara has an appointment at half past five, ah yes the young lady who had a referral from another ortho  yes thats right said her mum. The receptionist told them to take a seat and fill out some paperwork. After 10 minutes a nurse came out Zara shmidt please Zara looked up she was surprised the receptionist had headgear on and when she smiled it looked as tho her mouth was filled with plastic and metal Zara stood up to follow her hoping she wouldn't have that much metal and certainly not headgear.

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« Reply #18 on: 18. December 2023, 05:14:11 AM »
Part 6

Several weeks have gone by since Zara found herself stranded in East Berlin. Since that evening, she had been careful to not drink so much at the clubs she went to and thankfully had not fallen asleep on the tram home.

As time passed, Zara forgot about the orthodontic assessment Karen had given her. However, one evening she returned from work. Her mother was a little off-hand with her. Zara couldn't work out why, what could she possibly have done, she wondered. Finally her mother said, "Zara, when were you going to tell me about this?" She held up a crumpled piece of paper.

Zara recognised it as the notes Karen gave her regarding her bite. "Oh I, er, had forgotten about that," said Zara.

"Listen, Zara," her mum said, "if you need treatment, we should get it sorted. I know you get jaw pain sometimes. I think you need to see to it before you get much older. I've already made you an appointment with an ortho not far from here so you can get there easily."

"Okay mum, will you come with me for the first time at least?"

"Of course darling, that's no problem. Your appointment is tomorrow at half past 5."

Zara couldn't take it all in. Suddenly she was going to an appointment where she might end up with braces.

The next evening, Zara and her mum went to the ortho office. Zara was pleased to see it was a modern-looking place. In fact, it smelled of new paint, as well as the usual medical smell these places always have. Zara's mum went to the receptionist and said, "My daughter Zara has an appointment at half past five."

"Ah yes, the young lady who had a referral from another ortho."

"Yes, that's right," said her mum.

The receptionist told them to take a seat and fill out some paperwork.

After 10 minutes, a nurse came out. "Zara Shmidt, please."

Zara looked up. She was surprised, the receptionist had headgear on, and when she smiled, it looked as though her mouth was filled with plastic and metal. Zara stood up to follow her, hoping she wouldn't have that much metal and certainly not headgear.

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« Reply #19 on: 18. December 2023, 17:50:40 PM »
Things are about to get interesting!

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« Reply #20 on: 11. March 2024, 23:56:52 PM »
Soon it was Zaras turn the ortho greeted her warmly now don't worry Zara he said as your a friend of Karen's il be extra gentle OK? Zara felt comforted by this soon they were joined by a nurse who also had brightly colored powerchains on as well as pink headgear. Zara gasped when she saw it the ortho said you like Jane's braces they certainly stand out don't they? Jane blushed and the ortho said right let's get started, he examined Zaras teeth mumbling thing to the nurse who was writing lots of notes and Zara thought she was drawing something on a big pad. After what seemed like a lifetime he said OK Zara I've examined you and can tell you you need full bands and I think you need a facemask I think you'll be in braces for 3 years although towards the end it will just be straight forward bands. Zara was in shock she didn't know what to say what to think. The ortho had gone to explain the treatment plan to Zaras mother. Both women were in shock neither expected Zara needed such work doing

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« Reply #21 on: 12. March 2024, 00:12:44 AM »
Part 7

Soon it was Zara's turn. The ortho greeted her warmly. "Now don't worry, Zara," he said. "As you're a friend of Karen's, I'll be extra gentle, okay?"

Zara felt comforted by this. Soon they were joined by a nurse, who also had brightly colored powerchains on, as well as pink headgear. Zara gasped when she saw it. The ortho said, "You like Jane's braces? They certainly stand out, don't they?" Jane blushed and the ortho said, "Right, let's get started."

He examined Zara's teeth, mumbling things to the nurse who was writing lots of notes, and Zara thought she was drawing something on a big pad. After what seemed like a lifetime, he said, "Okay, Zara, I've examined you and can tell you you need full bands, and I think you need a facemask. I think you'll be in braces for 3 years, although towards the end it will just be straightforward bands."

Zara was in shock. She didn't know what to say, or what to think. The ortho had gone to explain the treatment plan to Zara's mother. Both women were in shock, neither expected Zara to need such work done.

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Re: New story Zara,s braces
« Reply #22 on: 12. March 2024, 00:20:32 AM »
I know there is more than one way to edit this story, and adding punctuation in different ways can change how the story reads. It could also have been left as one paragraph. This is just how I felt it worked the best.

I really enjoy the stories Kelly-Marie writes and hope to see more of them.

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Re: New story Zara,s braces
« Reply #23 on: 12. March 2024, 19:23:40 PM »
Thanks for your kind words braceface il try not to leave it so long for the next installment

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Re: New story Zara,s braces
« Reply #24 on: 15. March 2024, 16:55:48 PM »
Keep up the good work!