I found out what caused my Internet to go wrong it was my fault the plug for my routrs mains supply is in a rather dodgy old socket and  even just touching it caused the Internet box to go off. Now it's sorted kind of the socket is still loose but at least now I know about it.

On a more positive note il post a new chapter very soon

Part 6

Several weeks have gone by since Zara found herself stranded in East Berlin. Since that evening, she had been careful to not drink so much at the clubs she went to and thankfully had not fallen asleep on the tram home.

As time passed, Zara forgot about the orthodontic assessment Karen had given her. However, one evening she returned from work. Her mother was a little off-hand with her. Zara couldn't work out why, what could she possibly have done, she wondered. Finally her mother said, "Zara, when were you going to tell me about this?" She held up a crumpled piece of paper.

Zara recognised it as the notes Karen gave her regarding her bite. "Oh I, er, had forgotten about that," said Zara.

"Listen, Zara," her mum said, "if you need treatment, we should get it sorted. I know you get jaw pain sometimes. I think you need to see to it before you get much older. I've already made you an appointment with an ortho not far from here so you can get there easily."

"Okay mum, will you come with me for the first time at least?"

"Of course darling, that's no problem. Your appointment is tomorrow at half past 5."

Zara couldn't take it all in. Suddenly she was going to an appointment where she might end up with braces.

The next evening, Zara and her mum went to the ortho office. Zara was pleased to see it was a modern-looking place. In fact, it smelled of new paint, as well as the usual medical smell these places always have. Zara's mum went to the receptionist and said, "My daughter Zara has an appointment at half past five."

"Ah yes, the young lady who had a referral from another ortho."

"Yes, that's right," said her mum.

The receptionist told them to take a seat and fill out some paperwork.

After 10 minutes, a nurse came out. "Zara Shmidt, please."

Zara looked up. She was surprised, the receptionist had headgear on, and when she smiled, it looked as though her mouth was filled with plastic and metal. Zara stood up to follow her, hoping she wouldn't have that much metal and certainly not headgear.

Soon it was Zaras turn the ortho greeted her warmly now don't worry Zara he said as your a friend of Karen's il be extra gentle OK? Zara felt comforted by this soon they were joined by a nurse who also had brightly colored powerchains on as well as pink headgear. Zara gasped when she saw it the ortho said you like Jane's braces they certainly stand out don't they? Jane blushed and the ortho said right let's get started, he examined Zaras teeth mumbling thing to the nurse who was writing lots of notes and Zara thought she was drawing something on a big pad. After what seemed like a lifetime he said OK Zara I've examined you and can tell you you need full bands and I think you need a facemask I think you'll be in braces for 3 years although towards the end it will just be straight forward bands. Zara was in shock she didn't know what to say what to think. The ortho had gone to explain the treatment plan to Zaras mother. Both women were in shock neither expected Zara needed such work doing

I know there is more than one way to edit this story, and adding punctuation in different ways can change how the story reads. It could also have been left as one paragraph. This is just how I felt it worked the best.

I really enjoy the stories Kelly-Marie writes and hope to see more of them.

Keep up the good work!