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Re: New story : Alecja's need of orthodontics - Ch. 5 - The decision
« Reply #15 on: 30. April 2021, 17:41:43 PM »
Nice job! Looking forward to reading the rest of the story

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Re: New story : Alecja's need of orthodontics - Ch. 5 - The decision
« Reply #16 on: 30. April 2021, 19:25:28 PM »
This story is so good so far! Please keep going :)

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Re: New story : Alecja's need of orthodontics - Ch. 5 - The decision
« Reply #17 on: 30. April 2021, 20:58:32 PM »
You just know the devil will be in those paragraphs she didn't read!

Just one super nit-picky proofreading feedback that won't bother anyone: the £ always goes before the number in the UK.  ;)

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« Reply #18 on: 01. May 2021, 00:41:06 AM »
I did kind of wonder about that, duncombec. Thank you for pointing it out to me. I will correct that in the future and make the change in my current copy.

Radian is writing a very good story and I am looking forward to more of it.

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Re: New story : Alecja's need of orthodontics - Ch. 5 - The decision
« Reply #19 on: 02. May 2021, 18:57:23 PM »
Keep up the good work!????????

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Thank you guys, and sorry for the Pound Sterling.  :o

Here is the new chapter, still proofread by Braceface2015.

I made some minor changes after his proofreading. I hope I did not make any mistakes on these. ;D

Chapter 6 - The panic and the need of consolation

I came back from the orthodontist's office, walking down the street to my apartment, beginning to feel the pain caused by the spacers placed between several of my teeth. I started thinking about the idea of being a metal-braced woman: 'What is the sensation to have all these metal things in the mouth and how will others react when they see my smile when the braces will be on?'

It was almost 9 pm when I arrived at my place. I prepared the dinner: only a vegetable soap and apple compote as the desert, because of the increasing pain in my teeth caused by the spacers, which are definitely very painful. I also took one advised painkiller to feel relieved of the pain for the night.

I searched on the Internet for the different kinds of treatment with metal braces and saw some pictures of each treatment. I began to regret that I made my choice so quickly, without seeing another orthodontist to get another medical opinion. I was not sure I wanted metal brackets on my teeth for the next 18 to 24 months. I liked to be classy and dressed in my best nearly every day but what would I look like with a teenager's silver smile? And I was a 33-year-old woman who was single. I would probably stay single until the braces were removed at the age of 35. Moreover, I started thinking I would probably lose all my credibility in my job, especially in front of guys like Boris.

I started panicking again. ‘Why did I do that? Could I cancel it?’ I was sure at this time that I wanted to at least delay the treatment. I needed to call the orthodontist's office now but it was probably closed at 10 PM. I still tried, but no one answered of course.

So, I called my best friend Claire, who lived in the same town as me, to talk to her about my big problem. She already knew the whole thing about my dental problem before this afternoons appointment. Claire is a red long-haired woman, aged 32, with beautiful green eyes and a beautiful white smile. Indeed, she was a braces wearer when she was a teenager. She always has a great look. Unfortunately, she had been single for a while at the time. The last thing you needed to know is Claire was in a wheelchair due to an accident when she was 17, which left her a C5/C6 incomplete quadriplegic, paralysed from the chest down. I did not know her at that time, but I guess it has been a major event and a struggle to cope with. She still is a really nice and supportive person. I hoped she was not in her bed at this late hour. Indeed, she needs assistance to go to bed, so maybe she was already sleeping. The phone rang.

-   “Hey, my friend,” said Claire.

-   "Hey Claire, I'm so relieved that you are not in bed at this late hour. Am I bothering you? How are you? Do you have the time to talk a little bit?" I asked.

-   "In fact, technically, I am in bed. Paula (one of her caregivers) has just left after helping me to get into it, but I'm still not sleeping. I am watching an uninteresting TV show comfortably laying in my bed. I'm glad to hear from you, like always. I'm fine. I had a very good and intense day and did plenty of things. I'm a little tired and glad it is the weekend, but there is absolutely no problem talking together, all night if necessary. My catheter is installed, so I no longer need to get up to go to the bathroom," she said jokingly in the end (Claire talks about every aspect of her disability with ease and humor).

-   "Wow, you seem super fine! So happy to hear that. You will be able to take some rest just after your Czech native friend bothers you a little bit. What did you do so satisfying?" I said.

-   “You are not bothering me at all, of course. Many projects in my company are coming to their end. Things are finally moving forward. We’re beginning to raise money,” she said (Claire owns a company whose goal is to find solutions for aids for disabled people).

-   "Oh, that's very good news. You wanted to achieve your projects for a long time," I said.

-   "And what's up for you Alecja. Today was the day of your first orthodontist appointment, wasn't it? How was it? I'm a little worried that you're calling me so late," she said.

-   “Hmmm… not very good. That’s why I’m calling you. I am very anxious about what happened with the orthodontist,” I replied.

I told Claire how the appointment was and that I signed up to start orthodontic treatment with metal braces.

-   "Ohhh, poor dear. But you don't have to worry so much about that. It's only braces. It's temporary and it's for your health. You know, I had metal braces when I was a teenager. Okay, it's more common to have them at that age but it was still not that easy, because when you're a teenager, you build yourself up and you need to make your self-confidence grow up and braces don't help at all. Moreover, I had mine between the ages of 15 and 19, when I was in high school and the first year of college, and I had my accident in the middle of the treatment. Because of it and even if the braces stayed on, my treatment was interrupted for more than a year and I lost plenty of time. So, I wore braces for 4 years, as a crippled teenager, then a young adult. It was a challenge but I don't regret any part of this. I was so used to seeing myself with the braces that I pretty loved them in the end. I was even a little disappointed when they were removed. And now, I love my smile now, even if my teeth have shifted a little bit since. If I had the choice, I think I would rather wear them now, as an independent woman than before as an unachieved teenager in a wheelchair. You will stay a smart and beautiful woman anyway," she said kindly.

-   Really sorry, Claire. I'm so sorry. I don't have the right to complain to you and you're totally right, 18 to 24 months of braces is nothing compare to what you've been through. You're a wonderful person: so strong and always listening. By the way, I find your teeth and your smile really beautiful. I did not notice anything wrong with them," I said.

-   "Don't be sorry. You're my best friend and you are worrying about something that concerns you. It's normal for me to listen to you and to help you go through this. And I really understand it's not easy at all for you. This is a major change you'll have to cope with during a couple of years. You know, I'm not always strong but I have to do my best to push myself every day. If I don't, my wheelchair won't move to the supermarket and I will be hungry, which makes me angry (laughing). And for my smile, I can assure you my teeth are not perfect. Besides, it makes me think that I could consider fixing that too," Claire said, jokingly.

-   "No, you don't need it, sweetie."

We talked together during the next 2 hours that night, until midnight, about braces, life and lots of things, especially shopping. Claire was a fashion lover too. About the braces, she made me hesitate about cancelling the treatment but even if her treatment was probably a lot harder, I'm not ready to start treatment for myself. I went to bed thinking to give a call to Dr. Gipsen's office the next morning to ask if it was still possible to cancel everything.



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I am enjoying being able to help by proofreading this story. I have added the latest chapter to TheArchive with the changes that you made.

Each writer should be happy with what they write and the changes that you make are good. I'm enjoying this story and eagerly await each new chapter.

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Its interesting when reading a story by someone for whom English is a second language, i can see a certain amount of your own native language structures in there... but what us much more interesting is seeing the various aspects of small things (and also people's attitudes to things) that are different in your country to mine (England)... these are actually great things to see in someone's writing.... (in fact I often do this on purpose, just to annoy any Americans, who like to think they are English!).

So don't worry that your writing is not in perfect English, it is absolutely understandable, and enjoyable!

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So while I haven't posted in a while, I want to let you know that I do like this story and want you to continue it to where you see it going. While I haven't written anything for this or any other braces website, I do appreciate what you and any other writer does. I like the pace you're setting and want to see where you take this great start

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Great story !! Please continue

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I like the story so far and am very interested to see where it goes; thanks for writing it!

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Thank you all for your support. I think reviews are important to go on writing.

Its interesting when reading a story by someone for whom English is a second language, i can see a certain amount of your own native language structures in there... but what us much more interesting is seeing the various aspects of small things (and also people's attitudes to things) that are different in your country to mine (England)... these are actually great things to see in someone's writing.... (in fact I often do this on purpose, just to annoy any Americans, who like to think they are English!).

I'd like to discuss more about that, especially the difference between our countries about people's attitude. Maybe a new topic should be created about that !

By the way, here is the new chapter, still with Braceface2015's help. Alecja could have her braces on soon  ;)

Chap 7 The regrets and the resignation

I woke up at 10 AM this morning because I did not sleep well last night. I could not stop questioning myself about my treatment and being disturbed by the pain caused by the spacers. It was very painful when I woke up and I immediately had to take a painkiller.

After a breakfast with only drinks - I could not eat something at all because of the pain -, I called the orthodontist's office to ask my question about cancelling my treatment.

-   "Hi, Dr. Jshipshen's office. What can I do for you? Shlshlshl," a woman said.

-   “Hello, Alecja Pacejka on the phone, is that you Suzan?”

-   “Yeshh, it ishh, Are the shpaschersh okay, shlshlshl?”

-   "Quite painful but this is not why I'm calling you. Well, Suzan, I thought a lot about starting orthodontic treatment last night and I'm not sure I want to do it for now. I'd like to cancel everything, waiting for a little bit more to be sure to do it or not," I said.

-   “Ohh, Shhorry to hear szhat, slhslhslh. I know it’sh not eazhy for you to do shuschh a treatment, slhslhslh. But I szhink it’sh too late to do it now. The contract you have signed containszh a clauszhe according to whischh if you shtop the treatment or you’re not compliant at any time, you will have to pay an indemnity of  £8,000, slhslhslh.” she said.

-   “…but… but… hmm… are you sure, because I did not really start the treatment yet and I only signed the contract yesterday night?” I asked.

-   “Yesh, I am shure. Szhish ish to compel pashientsh not to shtop szheir treatment before szhe end, whischh could damage szheir dentition, slhslhslh. And actually, szhe treatment haszh already started with the moldszh and the shpascherszh, slhslhslh,” she replied.

-   "Oh no… What if you ask Dr. Gipsen if, as an exception, she accepts to break the contract without any indemnity? I am ready to pay whatever you ask for the molds and the spacers." I asked, a little bit confused.

-   "Oh, I shhouldn't do szhat. Dr. Jshipshen ish intranszhijshent with szhat kind of requesht, slhslhslh. You know, schhe ish very shtrict wiszh Shtaschey and myshelf too and wouldn't accshept susch a requesht if one of ush ashk it, slhslhslh. Lishten to me, it could be worshe for you wiszh your treatment after, slhslhslh," she said.

-   “You’re scaring me. Is she that horrible?” I said.

-   "Schhe ish not horrible. Schhe ish jusht very shtrict and likesh to have the e|ntire control in what she doeszh. I shhould not tell you szhat but about on|e year ago, slhslhslh, I ashked for a delay to get my forshush ap|pliansche becauszhe my vacashionsh shtart the day after and I did not want to have it during szhat time, slhslhslh. Schhe refuszhed and put szhe forshush appliansche on and added a lip bumper on szhe lower jaw, whisch waszh not shupposzhed to be plasched at all, I shtill have boszh on, slhslhslh. I alwaysh szhought schhe added zhe lip bumper becaushe of my demand of delay," she said.

-   “Oh my god, I don’t know what these appliances look like but it sounds not good. I hope she did not do that because of your request. Okay, I won’t insist anymore. Thanks for the information Suzan and have a good day!”

-   “Szhanksh Alecjsha, you too! Bye.”

I was totally upset by what Suzan told me. £8,000 to pay if I wanted to stop now and it was not an option. But the worst is Dr. Gipsen looked like she was very rude with her patients, punishing them if they were not compliant enough.

I thought at this time it was better to stop questioning too much about starting orthodontic treatment, which was definitely going to start in two weeks. I was so afraid of it.

Staying upset for the rest of the day, I did not go out today, preferring trying to relax with gym, meditation and several cups of tea. I only ate soap and apple compote today because of the spacers.

The two weeks passed quickly, the pain caused by the spacers decreasing. During that time, I wondered a lot how it would be to have braces and what kind of appliance I may have, hoping I would only have brackets and nothing affecting my speech like Suzan or Stacey. I was surprised to think sometimes positively about the braces, about how intriguing they are, how was it to kiss someone or do other things with your partner, taking care not to hurt him. On second thought, I told myself I did not find braces that disgusting or awful. Okay, it is metal stuck in the mouth but I was not shocked or found it repulsive when I saw all these persons with braces at the orthodontist's office. On the contrary, I thought, 'At least, they take care of themselves'. I was sure I would not be pleased to have them on but it was not such a disaster. I had other assets to highlight and I should deal being two years in braces. I finally thought that maybe I could find a boyfriend who would not be bothered by it.

During that time, I also was more focused on the teeth of people that I met at work, in the street, at the supermarket, searching for a sign of present or past braces. I only saw teenagers with braces. For the adults, there is a simple rule: whether their teeth are straight, so there is a very high probability they had braces before, or their teeth are slightly or strongly crooked, which look not less repulsive than having braces and which means they did not have braces (or they did not care about the retention part).

The stress began to grow up at the start of the second week. My treatment was officially going to start on Friday, the 15th of June. I had to remember that date. I could not stop telling myself I should probably be free on the 15th of June in two years.

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It is so nice and good story! I like it very much! Thank you for it!