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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #75 on: 05. October 2022, 17:19:56 PM »
Good job, hoping there's more!

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #76 on: 06. October 2022, 00:25:07 AM »
Funny, just yesterday I saw this post after scrolling down, and now I get to read more! I really like how they met, and how there is more than just scoliosis bonding them together. I also love how Jen cares enough for Mel to get enough courage to get braces so Mel would have a supporter. Overall, great story!

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« Reply #77 on: 14. October 2022, 18:54:15 PM »
Chapter 35.

As Jen stood by the pond, pinching off pieces of bread and tossing them piece by piece to the family of ducks in the water, Mel watched Jen.  Mel liked seeing her girlfriend happy.  And from the giggles that were coming from Jen as she watched the ducks fighting over the bread, it seemed she was happy.  And at least for the moment, she had forgotten about the cumbersome new orthodontic work in her mouth.  After Jen had tossed the last bit of bread to the ravenous ducks, Mel wrapped her arm around her and whispered to her "you are so cute."  Jen turned her head to Mel and said "aww, thank you.  You know, you aren't too bad yourshelf" and gently kissed her.  The two stood there for several more minutes, simply enjoying the moment. 

Mel glanced down at her watch, and with a mock pout said "I hate for this to end, but I guess I need to get back to work.  At least it is Friday.  Just a few more hours until we get our weekend pardons".  Jen laughed and replied "I guess you are right" and squeezed Mel's rigid waist.

Back in the Scoliclinic's parking lot, Jen asked Mel to get in her car with her for a moment.  Once both were seated she looked over at Mel and said "thank you again for the flowersh.  You really don't know how musch they mean to me".  Mel responded "I am so glad you like them. And thank you for our little picnic.  You really don't know how much that meant to me.  I do have a favor to ask, can you check and make sure I don't have too much food stuck in my braces?".  Mel turned and leaned over the console towards Jen and opened her mouth wide.  Jen looked into her mouth and said "hang on" as she got a proxy brush out of her purse.  She had spotted a bit of bread stuck back between a bracket and one of the scopes of Mel's herbst.  She made quick work getting it out.  She made one more inspection and declared "that looks like everything.  But, I better give it one final check".  With a devilish grin on her face, you placed her lips to Mel's and plunged her tongue into her mouth.

Mel responded eagerly.  The two spent several minutes locked together, weaving their tongues into and around the other's mouth. Jen felt the roughness of Mel's braces, the bolts and scopes of the herbst, and especially the warmth of her tongue.  After a few minutes, both flush, they came up for air.  Mel looked at Jen and said simply "wow..." and exhaled deeply.  Jen lovingly looked at Mel and said "shee, I told you thoshe flowers did something to me" and laid her hand on Mel's.  After each had somewhat regained their composure and touched up their makeup in the car mirrors, Mel looked at Jen and said "you don't know how much I want to go home with you right now.  But I have to go back inside, at least for the next few hours.'  As Mel grabbed her purse, Jen asked her "are you going to wear your facshmask thish afternoon?  You know, you might not get much chance to wear it thish evening." and winked.  Mel said "oh... in that case".  She took the facemask and a couple of elastics out of her purse, and like the seasoned veteran she was, quickly donned the headgear.  Jen looked at Mel and told her "you are sho shexy." and kissed her on the forehead pad of the mask.  She continued on "now go, get on in there.  I will shee you thish evening".

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #78 on: 15. October 2022, 04:22:21 AM »
Should this keep going?  I have the major plot points and a conclusion; just not sure how long it will take to get there and if it is worth it.

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #79 on: 15. October 2022, 05:34:40 AM »
Yes, of course!

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #80 on: 15. October 2022, 06:04:16 AM »
I'll give you my advice, take it for what's worth.

If you have a good idea of where you want your story to go, write it. The rest of us really don't matter that much. We will all appreciate reading what you write. As for how long it takes, that again is up to you to decide.

Some stories in my collection are over 100 pages long, others are 5 pages. One of my favourite stories is very short, another one is quite long.

When I write a story, I write what I want to read, not what I think other people will like.

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #81 on: 16. October 2022, 04:19:09 AM »
10/4

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #82 on: 16. October 2022, 10:32:27 AM »
Should this keep going?  I have the major plot points and a conclusion; just not sure how long it will take to get there and if it is worth it.

It's easy to fall into the trap of thinking you have to cover everything as one linear story, but I don't think anyone would have an issue if it became episodic, with some jumps forward in time, and if you think of anything later, have the character think back on it as a memory.

Hope that helps!

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« Reply #83 on: 17. October 2022, 02:23:14 AM »
Chapter 36.

Back in the office; Jen tried to concentrate on work.  But she just couldn’t.  Her thoughts kept wandering to Mel.  The time dragged; she was so ready for the weekend and for the work week to be over.  Around 4:30, as she tidied up things on her desk, her phone buzzed.  She looked down and saw a text from Christy, the hygienist at Dr. Cooper’s.  The text read:

C:  Ms. Collins, I just wanted to check with you to see if 2 p.m. tomorrow still worked for you to meet up?

J:  Yes!  I am looking forward to it.  Maybe you can share some tips and tricks to make this whole process easier.

C:  I will certainly try.  But to be honest; the biggest tip is simply time.  It takes a little time to get used to everything.  By the way, how has today gone?  How are you feeling?

J:  I think I will survive.  Talking is still a challenge.  Eating is a bigger one.  And then there is the whole issue of just having to face the world with all this metal.  But I am making it.  I hope you are right and it will get easier.

C:  i promise you it will.  I have your address; and I will see you at 2 tomorrow.  Have a great evening.

J:  Thank you so much.  And I hope you have a great evening too!

As Jen finished packing up her things; she felt gratitude towards the ladies at Dr. Cooper’s.  Both Diane and Christy had reached out to offer help and support.  As rough as she feared the next couple of years might be, at least she felt she was being treated at an office that cared about her.  She was grateful for the little informal support group that was offering her guidance.  Foremost of whom was Mel, who she couldn’t wait to get home to and see.  With that, she turned off her office light, closed the door, and headed towards her car.

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #84 on: 17. October 2022, 19:39:46 PM »
You're doing a great job @mr_90proof, I'm really enjoying this story

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« Reply #85 on: 18. October 2022, 08:22:19 AM »
Chapter 37.

As Jen approached their house, she noticed Mel’s car was already in the driveway.  This was not unusual; as Mel did get off early on Fridays.  Jen parked her car and went inside.  She said loudly “I’m home”.  She got no response.  She headed towards the kitchen, thinking maybe Mel had her ear buds in and hadn’t heard her.  If so, she was going to try to sneak up on her and surprise her.  And then kiss her.  But the kitchen and dining room were empty.  Jen was wondering what was going on as she exited the kitchen and reentered the den.  She then saw the flower petals on the carpet, leading from the front door to the closed door of their bedroom.  Jen had completely missed them when she first entered the house.

She went to the bedroom door and opened it.  As she did, she smelled the fragrance of the candles burning inside.  The room was dark, lit only by the light of the few burning candles and the ambient light coming through the drawn shades. Jen’s eyes were not adjusted to the light.  But there was light enough for her to clearly see Mel seductively propped up on one elbow in the bed.  She was not wearing her back brace or her facemask.  Instead she was wearing nothing but a sheer white bustier that framed her gorgeous breasts. 

Jen was blown away, her heart skipping a beat.  After a moment of taking it all in she made eye contact with Mel.  Once she did, Mel said “I hope you meant what you said at lunch”.


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« Reply #86 on: 23. October 2022, 18:28:14 PM »
Chapter 38.

The next morning the light was already pouring in through the shades when Jen woke.  Before she opened her eyes, she noticed she felt strange.  She was sleeping on her side, which she never did anymore since she started her scoliosis bracing regiment.  She realized she wasn't wearing her brace.  She could also tell she wasn't wearing her CPAP or facemask.  When she opened her eyes, she was met by the sight of Mel curled up beside her, feeling her warm breath on her face.  She then remembered the night before.  And a thousand thoughts rushed through her head.  She felt like the relationship between them had changed the night before.  She realized also that she was in love with her partner, who now slumbered beside her.  She reflected on the previous night, a smile coming to her face.  And she knew why she wasn't wearing her scoliosis brace, CPAP mask, and facemask.  She remembered it all, even falling asleep in Mel's arms; both exhausted but happy.  She lay there for a few minutes, enjoying the memory of the night before and the warmth of Mel beside her.  But she also had thoughts running through her head about what this all meant.   After a few minutes, she realized thinking about it wouldn't change anything, and she realized she felt a little bit sticky and needed a shower.  She slipped out of bed without waking Mel, noticing the alarm clock said 8:47.  She couldn't remember the last time she had slept so late.  But then she thought, she also couldn't remember the last time she had stayed up so late.

Jen slipped into the bathroom and silently shut the door.  She turned on the shower and soon stepped under the steamy water.  As she enjoyed her shower, she didn't see the bathroom door open through the steamy glass.  However, she did notice the shower door opening, and turned to see Mel stepping into the shower with her.  The two embraced again, kissing as the warm water rained down on them both.

After finishing their kiss, Jen pulled Mel into her and enveloped her in her arms.  She simply held her for a few moments.  She then let go and pulled back slightly while looking Mel solemnly in the eyes.  She said "I love you."  Mel stood there for a moment, the warm water running down her naked body, then replied "I love you too."  The two kissed once again.

After finishing their long shower together, now wearing bathrobes, Jen worked on her hair as Mel put on her makeup in the mirror.  Mel spoke first, saying "last night was wonderful.  But I do feel a little guilty about it".  Mel laughed when she noticed the crestfallen look come over Jen's face in the mirror.  She continued "no silly, not about us.  I feel guilty about not wearing my brace or facemask.  I cannot honestly remember the last night I did not wear them, it has been months.  You better not tattle on me to Dr. Cooper or Dr. Wellington".  Jen stepped behind Mel and wrapped her arms around her waist and said "I hope it wash worth it".  Mel turned in Jen's arms and kissed her.  She then replied "of course it was.  I guess it is a good thing today is a Saturday so I can catch up.  And you too.  But first, how about a little brunch?".

After finishing up their brunch, both retreated into the bathroom again to clean their braces.  After brushing and flossing, Mel picked up the wrench to Jen's expander, looping the blue safety cord around her finger.  Jen obediently tilted her head back and opened her mouth wide.  Jen inserted the wrench and gave the expander a turn.  As the wrench hit the back of Jen's throat she gagged.  Mel quickly withdrew the wrench from her mouth and hugged her.  She said "I am so sorry to hurt you."  Jen replied "no, you aren't. Thank you for doing it.  It is jusht shomething I have to get ushed to."  Mel answered "you know, you did so much better eating this morning.  And your lisp is so much better than a couple days ago.  You are getting the hang of it just fine".  Finished with their cleanings, they went into the bedroom where both put on their cotton undershirts.  Mel strapped on her back brace while Jen did the same.  Once Mel was strapped into her brace, she walked over to the dresser where Jen's cervical extension lay.  She looked at Jen and asked "will you wear your extension for me today?".  Jen replied "I guess I should, even as much as I don't want to".  Mel picked it up and intimately fit it onto Jen.  Once done, she said "you are so beautiful.  And you are doing so good" then kissed her.  She pulled back and said "and since I won't be able to kiss you once I put my facemask on I am going to make this one count" and again placed her lips to Jen's and slipped her tongue into her mouth.






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« Reply #87 on: 24. October 2022, 15:41:58 PM »
Chapter 39.

After finishing their kiss, Mel pulled back from Jen.  She looked at her lover and said “unfortunately I guess play time is over.  I better go and get my facemask out of my purse.  Meet you in the living room?  You can tell me all about the plans you have made for us for this weekend”.  Jen responded “that sounds good.  But spoiler alert I don’t have much planned other than being with you.”  Mel responded “that is the best plan I think I have ever heard.”

Once Mel had left the bathroom Jen stepped in front of the mirror and washed her face then patted it dry.  She then applied some lotion to her face and touched up her face with some light makeup, followed by a subdued lip stick.  She then attached an elastic to each of the hooks in her mouth.  Once complete she looked over at the protraction mask laying on the vanity.  She made an unconscious sigh as she picked it up.  She quickly fit the elastics onto the mask, and snapped the strap around her head.  She checked her image in the mirror and once again sighed, thinking “what have I gotten myself into?”

Jen entered the living room to find Mel on the couch with the TV on.  She looked at Mel, who now was also wearing her facemask and a Scoliclinic hoodie which hid her brace.  Jen stiffly sat down on the couch and leaned against Mel.  Jen said “I really don’t think I could make it through this without you.”  Mel responded “nonsense, you are an incredibly strong woman.  You can do anything you put your mind to.  But thank you.  And I am glad I can be here for you, and vice versa.  I do admit I am conflicted by the whole thing”.  Jen pulled away somewhat from Mel and awkwardly turned to face her.  “What do you mean?” Jen asked.  Mel continued “I am conflicted because I hate you are having to go through this.  I hate to see you in pain or even just uncomfortable.  And if I could I would make it all go away.  But, on the other hand, if you hadn’t come into the clinic two months ago I would have probably never met you.  And meeting you is the best thing that has ever happened to me.”

Jen was momentarily speechless as tears welled in her eyes.  She leaned back over and held Mel.  Jen said “that is the sweetest thing anyone has ever said to me.  And I promise you, that sentiment is mutual.”  Mel responded “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to make you cry”.  Jen wiped her eyes and said “I promise you they are tears of happiness.”


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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #88 on: 24. October 2022, 19:00:05 PM »
Really enjoying this story!

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Re: Jennifer
« Reply #89 on: 25. October 2022, 01:45:57 AM »
Thank you.